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Benjamin

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I walk where hump-backed turtles

come to shore

and feel an ageless tide of life

and warm sharp sand

around my feet--

see ancient barques

mustered in earthly might

with all their kings--

then stop-- until each lapping wave

sucks at the sand

beneath my static feet--

to think-- should I not move

I'd sink--

and blend with them

for evermore

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goldenlangur

Great use of language and images, Benjamin. You create effectively the poet's reflective and melancholy presence.

 

 

The idea of becoming one with the sea, tinged with a bitter sweet nihilistic note is drawn out well:

 

should I not move

I'd sink--

and blend with them

for evermore

 

Not just a physical melding but also a temporal one:

 

an ageless tide of life

 

The individual merging with the universal.

 

Beautiful!

 

 

Thank you.

goldenlangur

 

 

Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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Hello Tony and goldenlangur. Thanks for reading and leaving comment.

The Greek Islands provoked this particular thought, alhough I couldn't bring myself to mention the “wine dark sea”.

:-8) The Eastern Mediterranean is unique. It's history, cultures, mythology and now modern archaeology seem to draw one in; form ever changing images of how so many things are connected. Benjamin

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I walk where hump-backed turtles

come to shore

and feel an ageless tide of life

and warm sharp sand

around my feet--

see ancient barques

mustered in earthly might

with all their kings--

then stop-- until each lapping wave

sucks at the sand

beneath my static feet--

to think-- should I not move

I'd sink--

and blend with them

for evermore

 

Everything here talks of antiquity and the oneness of our world through the ages. Or something like that. The turtles, barges and kings float by as you realize your place in history. You even got in a perfect rhyme for the occasion. And what could reflect aging better than the Greek Islands and the sea? Could we have more, please?

Franklin

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Very mesmerizing, soothing and meditative as well. Interesting use of dashes, though I'm not sure if they make clear sense to me. Seems to me each dash is used to start a new thought?

 

Enjoyed

 

Lake

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Franklin. Thankyou for reading and for the kind comments.

Civilizations struggle to rise, then they fall and probably will do so for as long as mankind exists. We look for beginnings middles and ends in everything; in truth perhaps, we never will evolve sufficiently to understand our reasons for being here, so continue only to go with the flow.

Lake .Thankyou for your comments. Writing unpunctuated work always poses problems at some point. The dashes here represent pauses, hopefully to create a clarity between thoughts and to use your word, give a meditative feel to the piece.

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This work flows so nicely, charting a curving, loping path through the reader's experience. It is a simple design, of few words, and the poem is stronger for it. I also echo Franklin's comment. This work feels old and sure, a reminisance of the best kind. Well done.

GBrenton

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