Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted March 15, 2011 Share Posted March 15, 2011 (edited) Don't Walk Out That Door Don't you see the stars shining on us up above. Yesterday has come and gone. Without a kiss goodbye till we meet again. I love you from the bottom of my heart. Don't you know you are the wind that stirs my heart. I know the destroyer wants you. What am I to do. I follow my hearts desire. I know I should of kept the ring of promise you gave to me. Please don't fall in love with another man. I would let you go amongst the stars if you didn't love me anymore. The passion I felt for you has always been there since the beginning of time. Oh Nalene you are the wind that moves the mountains in my heart. I would let you go if you wanted to leave. But I would never look at life the same again. Oh Please Don't go. I'm asking for another chance. As the rain that falls from the grey sky up above. My eyes are those tear drops that fall down from up above. All I can do is ask for you to do is not to leave, but stay close to my heart. When the morning comes I want you next to my side. Oh please don't go. I am asking you from the bottom of my heart. Oh Nalene please don't go. I love you so much. It's been many life times it seems remember the breeze the first time we gazed at one another. Oh Nalene, Please don't go. All I am asking, is for another chance. Can't you see my heart is broken and has fallen apart. The blood of my heart has stained the world. Oh please don't go. All I am is asking for is another chance. I threw away the ring of promise. If I hadn't given to a bird from up above. It would have bleen stolen from me anyway. So Nalane don't you see Don't walk out that door. I am asking you not to leave. I love you from the bottom of my heart. My heart is broken. I am such a fool to let you go to the wind all you need to know is you are the wind that stirs my heart. And that I love you so. One day I will make you honorable I promise you this. I will be your knight in shining armor. I will be your prince and you will be my lovely wild flower of a angel. So please don't walk out that door. Or my world will be bitter and cold. Oh Nalene, I love you so much. You are the wind that stirs my heart. and I am lost in the wind. I will marry you and you will be my princesses. Edited March 15, 2011 by Larsen M. Callirhoe Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted March 16, 2011 Share Posted March 16, 2011 The anxiety brought on by feelings of love and longing is augmented by the threat of an external, metaphysical force: I know the destroyer wants you. What am I to do. Enjoyed the lyrical flow, Victor. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
abstrect-christ Posted March 18, 2011 Share Posted March 18, 2011 although it's good you kept it at average joe language there is the odd average joe mistake such as the 'of' in this first line "I know I should of kept the ring of promise" and lines that, to me, atleast need a question mark: "Can't you see my heart is broken and has fallen apart." typo's: "It would have bleen stolen from me anyway." *been "of a angel." *an and you will be my princesses. *princess? Or is it purposely spelt as more than one princess? otherwise, it was good, would be better with a beat behind it but you could always just add that later right? Quote Pinhead "Unbearable, isn't it? The suffering of strangers, the agony of friends. There is a secret song at the center of the world, Joey, and its sound is like razors through flesh." Joey "I don't believe you." Pinhead "Oh come, you can hear its faint echo right now. I'm here to turn up the volume. To press the stinking face of humanity into the dark blood of its own secret heart." "There's a starving beast inside my chestplaying with me until he's boredThen, slowly burying his tusks in my fleshcrawling his way out he rips open old woundsWhen I reach for the knife placed on the bedside tableits blade reflects my determined faceto plant it in my chestand carve a hole so deep it snaps my veinsHollow me out, I want to feel empty"-- "Being Able To Feel Nothing" by Oathbreakerhttps://www.youtube.com/watch?v=aBPy3xNwwL8 "Sky turns to a deeper grey the sun fades by the moon hell's come from the distant hills tortures dreams of the doomed and they pray, yet they prey and they pray, still they prey"-- "Still They Prey" by Coughhttps://soundcloud.com/relapserecords/sets/cough-still-they-pray Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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