JoelJosol Posted March 24, 2011 Share Posted March 24, 2011 (edited) Stepping on the beach, the sun throws its first rays against the sky. I see hundreds of clouds, in little pieces, as if keeping each other warm. The waters ripple, bringing forward an image of a thousand lights from far away. So far, it exposes tiny crabs climbing out of their pits, and star fishes, still and rigid on the ground deserted by the sea. The breeze dishevels my hair. I have to turn my face away from the light. When I look back, a wall of water blocks the light, and its noise rushes upon me like a pile of blankets, heavy, wet and tight. I just got a one day break to have time to write something again. I just need to write again :-) Hi guys. Edited March 25, 2011 by JoelJosol Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted March 24, 2011 Share Posted March 24, 2011 Hi, Joel. A remarkably fluid read. Only one spot causes an easily prevented stumble. In the third couplet, there should be an article ("a") in front of "thousand." In any case, a lovely read. I appreciate how you captured the "Early Morning Light." Thanks for sharing it, and welcome back! Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted March 24, 2011 Share Posted March 24, 2011 Hello Joel and welcome. You paint a languid yet clear picture in words that are a pleasure to read. I particularly liked the contrasted open ending. Benjamin. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted March 25, 2011 Author Share Posted March 25, 2011 Hi Tony, thanks for the catch. I dropped the "a" for a reason I can't remember. Thanks, Benjamin. I will come back once I get fully charged physically :-) Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted April 5, 2011 Share Posted April 5, 2011 Oh, Joel. I loved the setting of this poem. The imagery is simply perfect. You made good observation and you wrapped it in the best way. Thank you for sharing. Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted April 7, 2011 Author Share Posted April 7, 2011 Hi Aleks, thanks for the appreciation. I am glad to see there are more contributors this time around in your site. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted April 15, 2011 Share Posted April 15, 2011 Thank you, Joel. Yes, we got a new enthusiastic writers who participate in our board, which is great, but we also are looking forward for all our legacy members :). We have a history together :). Glad to see you around. Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
eclipse Posted May 4, 2011 Share Posted May 4, 2011 this is elegant and airy Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rosschandler Posted May 6, 2011 Share Posted May 6, 2011 good read. aqua marine aura to this poem. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted May 12, 2011 Share Posted May 12, 2011 OH Yum Joel! This is a sensory feast. I felt the the sea air on my face and the light blinded my eyes. Loved this. ~~Tink ps... Please never quit writing. I never tire of your work. Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted May 21, 2011 Author Share Posted May 21, 2011 Thank you guys - eclipse, ross and Tink - for the read. I'm glad you "felt" being there. Tink, thanks for the encouragement. Sometimes you think you lost the drive to write. Then, something happens to move you to do it one more time :-) Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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