Jalfrezi Posted May 12, 2009 Share Posted May 12, 2009 Happiness is me an old man at the time when I die A kiss from you on my smile as my final goodbye Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted May 12, 2009 Share Posted May 12, 2009 Wonderful expression, short, strong, wise, deep I loved this Jalfrezi Works perfect. Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
pawn shop Posted May 12, 2009 Share Posted May 12, 2009 You sound like a young Notradamus with your prediction of the future..... if only all of us could be sure of such things... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jalfrezi Posted May 12, 2009 Author Share Posted May 12, 2009 it's always just a guess Pawn Shop :? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted May 12, 2009 Share Posted May 12, 2009 interesting write with a twist of fate involved you never know. larsen aka victor Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted May 12, 2009 Share Posted May 12, 2009 Bless you Jalfrezi! What a marvellous coda you describe here! I chide myself even as I say this - you've got a great haiku-like tone here which could be extended into the tanka - the longer 5 line lyric cousin of the haiku. Thank you for a heavenly thought! goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 12, 2009 Share Posted May 12, 2009 I suppose old would be ok ... so long as one is happy I like the title! Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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