JoelJosol Posted March 27, 2011 Share Posted March 27, 2011 A hand hits a glass of water, turning it to its side. It does not matter which decisions are consensual. Is soiling reputation worse than wet business proposals? In simple English terms- 'It just happened.' There is wisdom in putting carpets on the floor for glasses to fall on and break quietly. Do people understand the urgency of the times? There is only a 15-minute break. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted March 28, 2011 Share Posted March 28, 2011 A wonderful window in an ordinary moment with resonance to the direness of the times: Loved these lines: There is wisdom in puttingcarpets on the floor for glasses to fall on and break quietly. Do people understand the urgency of the times? Makes it resonant beyond or deeper into the moment... Nice Work JJ! DC&J Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PDgb Posted March 29, 2011 Share Posted March 29, 2011 This is another stellar poem from one of my favorite authors on this site. I loved the imagery, you seem to have well mastered the art of concrete imagery. A small suggestion if I may. The use of question marks in your work, while perhaps being technically necessary, does not lend itself well to the strength of your poem. For me at least, your lines become stronger when large punctuation such as question marks or exclamation points is left out. Just a thought, I enjoyed this read. Quote GBrenton Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted March 29, 2011 Share Posted March 29, 2011 You portray workplace tension well in this poem. It's not quite set in a boiler room or call center, but could it take place in a cube farm with some on-edge middle management types in the mix? The poem is short and sweet. Enjoyed it a lot, Joel. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted March 30, 2011 Author Share Posted March 30, 2011 PDgb, thanks for the read and feedback. I have not tried punctuation-less poems yet. Tony, I'm glad that the poem offers multitude of interpretations and that you enjoyed it. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted April 10, 2011 Share Posted April 10, 2011 An insightful and skilful write. It provoked in me a mental flash of battery hens who gobble up feed when a light is switched on. Benjamin Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted April 15, 2011 Share Posted April 15, 2011 Hi, Joel. You are so good with expressing those small moments which are in the margins of our thinking, and you bring the attention to them. Very good. Impressed, as always. Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted April 21, 2011 Share Posted April 21, 2011 Hi Joel, I haven't read one of your poems for a while and this one reminded me what a master of rhythm you are. A poet sees the ordinary and describes the extraordinary of it. You do that so well... I loved this. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted April 28, 2011 Author Share Posted April 28, 2011 Thank you again, Ben, Aleks, and Tink. Very much encouraged. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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