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Snow dust coats web spirals

hitched to beds of dormant shrubs

cold-storage for wayward prey

bound to wait for spring

 

is not the word

for an aged mind

looking back to

warm wafts of summer

 

breezes on decks

filled with friends and

airy conversation

without a thought of fall

 

and recover with

leaves of old

memories that fade

with the ongoing winter

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Hi F,

 

I like the short lined poem, but I struggled a bit at the beginning and was looking for the subject of "is " at the beginning of the second stanza. I am not sure if it is the placement of the words or what, but I know it is my insufficient knowledge. Then the next three stanzas read smoothly to me. It must be a long winter, we are all looking forward to spring.

 

Thanks.

 

Lake

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Hi F,

 

I like the short lined poem, but I struggled a bit at the beginning and was looking for the subject of "is " at the beginning of the second stanza. I am not sure if it is the placement of the words or what, but I know it is my insufficient knowledge. Then the next three stanzas read smoothly to me. It must be a long winter, we are all looking forward to spring.

 

Thanks.

 

Lake

 

Thanks for reading. Just a trial gimmick where the last word of a stanza leads into the next. A little silly, maybe.

fdh

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  • 2 weeks later...

I imagine a scene while I read this poem - watching into the coldness outside, and flowing in memories. I like the way you expressed this poem, and also like your choice of words.

 

Well done.

 

Aleksandra

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

History of Macedonia

 

 

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