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Frank E Gibbard

Hello to all the folk out there

in the ether everywhere (yet

connected by this internet).

How close but remote can we

get? I talk to you who I do not

know more deeply than some

male friends though, to whom

I no real things impart still less

one thing that touches heart.

Daresay it is a manly thing to

conversation nothing bring

unless it be a view on sport

or how a gadget may be bought.

That's men for you we're the sort

with no emotion, it wasn't taught.

Edited by Frank E Gibbard
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rosschandler

very nice. i appreciate meter. i would consider this accentual verse purely given that some lines have a syllable or two more injected. i like the use of ellision and syntax inversion you included. i am not a fan of emjambments because that something i see in unrhymed verse. i rhyme so to me each line is complete by itself. however, it is crafty to utilize it. i read this trochaically and of course in tetrameter. i find it odd i scan things trochaically when the writer often says its to be read iambically as is common among most of us english speakers. however i like reading "HEL lo" and not "he LO" trochees seem more forceful and i liked reading this. i absolutely appreciate your skill.

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Hey, comeon, Frank ... You know all of us, your net friends, quite intimately! I mean, how long have we been reading each others' various pathologies? Quite a while! But I do see the point, well expressed in the second half of the poem. I myself do my best to avoid any water-cooler "sports talk," lol.

 

Tony

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Can poetry survive on such sorts of sports

and all manner of gigity gagets?

Guys agree on the ante-up fees

the subtle joys of the counts of their toys.

Edited by Gatekeeper

from the black desert

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