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The Bones Stay Behind


Walking through walls

I brought back stories

of gods and demons

alternate geometries

cosmic salesmen a

pitch always ending

in new apocalypses

cosmic serpent sw-

allows us whole



defies imaginal realities

both unseen and felt

undeniable matter


How real

the annoyed spider

building thick web

behind cloth gate

pale Guadalupe

is moved look

past unused

old window


Wait for a letter

an invitation

to sojourn

a new



When we

travel the smallest thing

reminds us at journey’s end

the bones always stay behind.

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this structure is very unique. poetic display is very affective on the reader. this topic is so universal and cosmic, grand, and yet you so eloquently and succinctly spek of it. good job.

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nicely done.s


"Unbearable, isn't it? The suffering of strangers, the agony of friends.

There is a secret song at the center of the world, Joey, and its sound is like razors through flesh."


"I don't believe you."


"Oh come, you can hear its faint echo right now. I'm here to turn up the volume.

To press the stinking face of humanity into the dark blood of its own secret heart."

"There's a starving beast inside my chest
playing with me until he's bored
Then, slowly burying his tusks in my flesh
crawling his way out he rips open old wounds

When I reach for the knife placed on the bedside table
its blade reflects my determined face
to plant it in my chest
and carve a hole so deep it snaps my veins

Hollow me out, I want to feel empty"
-- "Being Able To Feel Nothing" by Oathbreaker


"Sky turns to a deeper grey

the sun fades by the moon

hell's come from the distant hills

tortures dreams of the doomed

and they pray, yet they prey

and they pray, still they prey"
-- "Still They Prey" by Cough


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Your poems fascinate me, reading this one was, I felt, rather like trying to unravel a small Gordian knot. Enjoyed. Benjamin.

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Hello the doc,


My advice is scrap the visuals and line breaks (poems are written to be listened to) AND STAY ON MESSAGE. Ignore me, please. A lot of people do. ;)


Whatever: good luck to you,


Drown your sorrows in drink, by all means, but the real sorrows can swim

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Hi DC,


Your allusion to Mu immediately evokes nothingness and then I wonder if it alludes also to the lost continent. Even if I am clueless about your illusion your poem is richly textured and teases both the mind and the senses.


I love these details:

cosmic salesmen, annoyed spider, bones always stay behind


Is pale Guadalupe a reference to the volcanic island of Guadalupe?


So much to mull over and unravel. A journey beyond the surface of things and immediate allusions.



Thank you.




Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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Well, this poem I loved. Juris, this poem is wonderful. I loved almost every verse. I read it more than once, and I am sure I'll come back to read it again.



The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

History of Macedonia



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Thanks All! Brendan my partner said the same thing- and I agree- But reading it out-loud those peculiarities would be mute so, for now;-)


Really Thanks all for the feedback Haope all are well and I'll try to get back in the swing of things after poetry month!



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