fdelano Posted April 22, 2011 Posted April 22, 2011 (edited) Phantasm He whirls toward the touch of her hand and, then sits frozen, gaping at the completely naked woman. Her pale skin glows in the room's dimness, short, almost white hair like high, wind-blown cirrus above the startling green of her eyes. Unable to speak, he stands to reach and touch her cheek, a time lapse of years and a limitless distance of two feet. She grasps his hand with both of hers and presses its cup to her mouth.. She floats across infinite space to bury her face in his chest. He finally finds his voice through her fragrant mass of her hair. "How can this be? How can you be here, now? Oh my God, you feel good." She stands on toes to pull his head forward, finding his mouth with her own. So achingly frustrating is the slowness of his movements, trying to hold every part of her in his hands and against his body. He finds it perfectly logical that his clothes have also vanished. Their bodies join in delicious agony. As one, they spin in place, memories and feelings swirling about and through them, caught midair in time and the dream as the years fall away to this physical time of an ethereal moment. Their sudden merging lasts forever and ends in a second. Equally stunned with an erupting climax of shared emotions, they slowly part, each staring at the other. Edited April 22, 2011 by fdelano Quote
abstrect-christ Posted April 24, 2011 Posted April 24, 2011 nicely done dream imagery. although "and, then sits frozen," the first comma isn't necesary. Quote Pinhead "Unbearable, isn't it? The suffering of strangers, the agony of friends. There is a secret song at the center of the world, Joey, and its sound is like razors through flesh." Joey "I don't believe you." Pinhead "Oh come, you can hear its faint echo right now. I'm here to turn up the volume. To press the stinking face of humanity into the dark blood of its own secret heart." "There's a starving beast inside my chestplaying with me until he's boredThen, slowly burying his tusks in my fleshcrawling his way out he rips open old woundsWhen I reach for the knife placed on the bedside tableits blade reflects my determined faceto plant it in my chestand carve a hole so deep it snaps my veinsHollow me out, I want to feel empty"-- "Being Able To Feel Nothing" by Oathbreakerhttps://www.youtube.com/watch?v=aBPy3xNwwL8 "Sky turns to a deeper grey the sun fades by the moon hell's come from the distant hills tortures dreams of the doomed and they pray, yet they prey and they pray, still they prey"-- "Still They Prey" by Coughhttps://soundcloud.com/relapserecords/sets/cough-still-they-pray
tonyv Posted April 24, 2011 Posted April 24, 2011 Excellent treatment of a moment that "lasts forever and ends in a second," Franklin. Very dreamlike. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic
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