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a quiet drink


Benjamin
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white noise

of people in a bar

 

exotic smoke from

dubious sources

 

cool ale and

sliding clicks of dominoes

 

the clunk of darts

 

missiles--

that fly through air

 

make holes

where yesterday

there were no holes

 

and glowing coals--

tomorrows grey dust

on green hearth-tiles

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How cozy! There's a sense of time having passed (the holes that weren't there yesterday yet are today) that's offset by a sense of timelessness: the glowing coals which are not yet, but tomorrow will be, dust. Even the "white noise" of the people speaks toward transience. The same noise will be there tomorrow and the next day, but it can't ever be the exact same moment. A fantastic vignette!

 

Tony

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Frank E Gibbard

Philosophical poetry of the inn(s) and outs of one of the finest things sweetly encapsulated, very much liked Geoff.

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A busy place/poem B., almost a nostalgic scene with some of the games activities and mention of coal, though the overall feel of the poem is melancholic with the shift from green to grey. I like the form.

 

 

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Thanks Tony, Frank and Badge. It's funny how thought processes meander and digress with a drink alone by the fire. The most innocuous of things can suddenly prompt exteme thoughts. Pleased I only stayed for one, otherwise I might still be writing. :icon_sunny: Benjamin

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