dr_con Posted June 13, 2011 Posted June 13, 2011 Blessing The habit of suns without end to forge these elements from the unseen and unknown We are built from light and only this forgetting holds us here When we sleep worlds die stars blink out mountains crumble hearts break stories lost left is the love May we awake and shine. Quote thegateless.org
badger11 Posted June 17, 2011 Posted June 17, 2011 An invitation not to shape the world into a darkness, meaning and light coming from within... a perceptive poem Dr C. badge Quote
Benjamin Posted June 17, 2011 Posted June 17, 2011 Reminds me of an Albert Pine quote. "What we do dies with us. What we do for others and the world remains and is immortal." Benjamin. Quote
tonyv Posted June 18, 2011 Posted June 18, 2011 There's an implied immortality prevalent in this poem. It makes me think of the infinite expanse of a never ending, multi-level universe. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic
dr_con Posted July 2, 2011 Author Posted July 2, 2011 Thanks Tony, Badge & Benjamin! Yes indeed a poem brought forth by some of the implications of astrophysics- Glad ya all got it.... many, many thanks, DC&J Quote thegateless.org
Gatekeeper Posted July 3, 2011 Posted July 3, 2011 Reflective! :icon_sunny: Seriously, I like this. Last line is fitting, fun and appropriate. It can be hard to get last lines just right. Puzzled though with the line break between S2 & S3. Is that intentional? Seems odd. Quote from the black desert
Rea Posted July 4, 2011 Posted July 4, 2011 Blessing The habit of suns without end to forge these elements from the unseen and unknown We are built from light and only this forgetting holds us here When we sleep worlds die stars blink out mountains crumble hearts break stories lost left is the love May we awake and shine. Hello Dr Conn That's deep and philosophical, thought provoking, I love the last stanza; worlds die stars blink out mountains crumble hearts break stories lost left is the love May we awake and shine You ended on a positive note, a great start to the day. Best wishes Rea Quote
dr_con Posted July 4, 2011 Author Posted July 4, 2011 Gatekeeper, Rea Thank you for the comments! Yes the line break was intuitional, and I'm not wedded to it;-) But without punctuation, imagine a ':' and it'll probably feel less odd- although if you follow creative commons rules- You may change-alter-edit as long as you attribute the original artist;-) And Rea- Thanks! Much Grace, DC&J Quote thegateless.org
Frank E Gibbard Posted July 10, 2011 Posted July 10, 2011 Some scintillating metaphors/imagery in this DC courtesy of which we're blessed my friend. You are indeed one always looking at the stars. I like the contrasts in some of the images. Quote
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted July 10, 2011 Posted July 10, 2011 beautiful dr. con. i believe you nailed the nail stiking the tip perfect in your unique perspective of this poem about being blessed. this was a treat to read also! victor michael Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe
dr_con Posted July 16, 2011 Author Posted July 16, 2011 Frank, Larson as always- I appreciate your taking the time to engage in my sometimes humbling-mumbling-posey! Many Thanks! DC&J Quote thegateless.org
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