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Blessing

 

The habit of suns without end

to forge these elements

from the unseen and unknown

 

We are built from light

and only this forgetting

holds us here

When we sleep

 

worlds die

stars blink out

mountains crumble

hearts break

stories lost

left is the love

 

May we awake and shine.

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An invitation not to shape the world into a darkness, meaning and light coming from within...

 

a perceptive poem Dr C.

 

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Reminds me of an Albert Pine quote. "What we do dies with us. What we do for others and the world remains and is immortal." Benjamin.

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Thanks Tony, Badge & Benjamin! Yes indeed a poem brought forth by some of the implications of astrophysics- Glad ya all got it....

 

 

many, many thanks,

 

DC&J

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Gatekeeper

Reflective! :icon_sunny:

 

Seriously, I like this. Last line is fitting, fun and appropriate. It can be hard to get last lines just right.

 

Puzzled though with the line break between S2 & S3. Is that intentional? Seems odd.

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Blessing

 

The habit of suns without end

to forge these elements

from the unseen and unknown

 

We are built from light

and only this forgetting

holds us here

When we sleep

 

worlds die

stars blink out

mountains crumble

hearts break

stories lost

left is the love

 

May we awake and shine.

 

Hello Dr Conn

That's deep and philosophical, thought provoking, I love the last stanza;

worlds die

stars blink out

mountains crumble

hearts break

stories lost

left is the love

 

May we awake and shine

 

You ended on a positive note, a great start to the day.

Best wishes

Rea

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Gatekeeper, Rea Thank you for the comments! Yes the line break was intuitional, and I'm not wedded to it;-) But without punctuation, imagine a ':' and it'll probably feel less odd- although if you follow creative commons rules- You may change-alter-edit as long as you attribute the original artist;-)

 

And Rea- Thanks!

 

Much Grace,

 

DC&J

thegateless.org Come on over and check out my poetry substack y'all;-) Or if your bored, head to the Zazzle store: https://www.zazzle.com/store/gateless. If you buy anything I lose a bet, so consider that before you violate the digital rules.

 

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Frank E Gibbard

Some scintillating metaphors/imagery in this DC courtesy of which we're blessed my friend. You are indeed one always looking at the stars. I like the contrasts in some of the images.

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Larsen M. Callirhoe

beautiful dr. con. i believe you nailed the nail stiking the tip perfect in your unique perspective of this poem about being blessed.

 

this was a treat to read also!

 

victor michael

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Frank, Larson as always- I appreciate your taking the time to engage in my sometimes humbling-mumbling-posey!

 

Many Thanks!

 

DC&J

thegateless.org Come on over and check out my poetry substack y'all;-) Or if your bored, head to the Zazzle store: https://www.zazzle.com/store/gateless. If you buy anything I lose a bet, so consider that before you violate the digital rules.

 

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