dr_con Posted July 2, 2011 Share Posted July 2, 2011 You Know How Some People Are You Know How Some People Are And you meet their mother Now you understand O yes And there are children behind the yard Playing big thrusting sing-song challenges To the summer sun beyond green bird chants Transgressing fences and walls O yes And the winter is beyond the horizon It will always be these games of freedom O yes And then your name comes echoing through A sudden twilight Wooden weapons and wheeled wonders Spinning lonely left in darkening streets or grass O yes That feeling of loss even as you run home O yes When did we forget to go back To live forever in transit Always working under lifeless skies O yes Well you know how some people are Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted July 2, 2011 Share Posted July 2, 2011 O Yes! I loved this DC.... wooden weapons and wheeled wondersSpinning lonely left in darkening street or grass The sounds tripped off my tongue, the rhymn gave it sense and musicality, "O Yes, you know how some people are"...... ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gatekeeper Posted July 3, 2011 Share Posted July 3, 2011 O yes! The jigsaw pistol . . . and all the rest Enjoyed these bits. Quote from the black desert Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
badger11 Posted July 3, 2011 Share Posted July 3, 2011 (edited) Impressive Dr C. I feel you've crossed a boundary yourself in your recent poems. I find them more expressive, less knotted by intellect, but still true to your thinking. The lexis more connected to ordinary folk. Stylistic echoes of a poem I listened to yesterday: http://vimeo.com/2062457 badge Edited July 3, 2011 by badger11 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted July 4, 2011 Author Share Posted July 4, 2011 Tink, Gate & Badge- Wow- thank You! I enjoyed writing it and maybe, just maybe I am changing my voice a tad- Phases and evolution- Right O! Many Thanks, DC&J Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted July 4, 2011 Share Posted July 4, 2011 (edited) I like the style, the language choice and subject matter very much; I agree with Badge's comments re:lexis and connection. You have much to offer. Benjamin. Edited July 17, 2011 by Benjamin Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted July 5, 2011 Share Posted July 5, 2011 Remarkable, Juris. It's all good, but I especially loved: And the winter is beyond the horizon, and: A sudden twilight Wooden weapons and wheeled wonders Spinning lonely left in darkening streets or grass, and: Always working under lifeless skies. Well composed, repetition and all. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted July 16, 2011 Author Share Posted July 16, 2011 Benjamin and Tony- appreciate your appreciation- Much Gratitude! DC&J Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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