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Red Teeth


douglas
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I suppose you do this to yourself because you're still in love with him

 

As you'd said

 

Over and over again during the night of our first and only date

 

 

And my private alarm-thought was

 

Then why the hell are you dating?

 

And

 

Oh my god

 

I sure can pick 'em!

 

 

And so I went from groomed and eager prospect

 

To bored psychologist

 

There

 

Across from you

 

At the dinner table

 

 

One bottle of red wine

 

Two bottles of red wine

 

And a set of ruby red teeth grimacing across at me

 

 

The sucker I am kept me there

 

Stuck to my seat out of obligation

 

And empathy

 

 

When I was younger tragedy and drama

 

Seemed so much more compelling

 

 

Now it's just plain boring

 

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I like this style of writing which is practical and even matter-of-fact. Rather like thinking out loud but at the same time amusing and relevant. The irony of “One bottle of red wine/Two bottles of red wine/ And a set of ruby teeth grimacing across at me” struck a humorous note with me. I believe this would be a well received short performance piece. Benjamin

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Douglas,

 

Just amazing! Resonates with my red-toothed mad man- Who unfortunately come out just when I think he has been vanquished! Have been on both sides of that table, love that you made it into a poem- Accessible yes, profound and a bit cranky as well- I laughed out loud-really!

 

DC&J

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  • 3 months later...

thanks guys! glad you saw the combination of humour and crankiness - just as i'd intended - and yes, benjamin, i will perform this piece...

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