douglas Posted July 5, 2011 Share Posted July 5, 2011 I suppose you do this to yourself because you're still in love with him As you'd said Over and over again during the night of our first and only date And my private alarm-thought was Then why the hell are you dating? And Oh my god I sure can pick 'em! And so I went from groomed and eager prospect To bored psychologist There Across from you At the dinner table One bottle of red wine Two bottles of red wine And a set of ruby red teeth grimacing across at me The sucker I am kept me there Stuck to my seat out of obligation And empathy When I was younger tragedy and drama Seemed so much more compelling Now it's just plain boring Quote To receive love, you have to give it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted July 7, 2011 Share Posted July 7, 2011 I like this style of writing which is practical and even matter-of-fact. Rather like thinking out loud but at the same time amusing and relevant. The irony of “One bottle of red wine/Two bottles of red wine/ And a set of ruby teeth grimacing across at me” struck a humorous note with me. I believe this would be a well received short performance piece. Benjamin Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted July 8, 2011 Share Posted July 8, 2011 Douglas, this one's very accessible. Thanks for this personal glimpse. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted July 16, 2011 Share Posted July 16, 2011 Douglas, Just amazing! Resonates with my red-toothed mad man- Who unfortunately come out just when I think he has been vanquished! Have been on both sides of that table, love that you made it into a poem- Accessible yes, profound and a bit cranky as well- I laughed out loud-really! DC&J Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
douglas Posted October 23, 2011 Author Share Posted October 23, 2011 thanks guys! glad you saw the combination of humour and crankiness - just as i'd intended - and yes, benjamin, i will perform this piece... Quote To receive love, you have to give it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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