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A child hides

another pebble

beneath our apple tree.

 

A black pebble,

ovular

like a smooth seed.

 

In later years

it may remind him

to skim the sea,

 

skip several waves

before finally

resting.

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I skipped, like a stone along this magical piece- at once dream like and concrete- Well, well done Badge!

 

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Nicely done Badge.Children offer us many opportunities for philosophical sojourn, pebbles always have a magical significance in their world-- and ours. Benjamin.

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...pebbles always have a magical significance in their world-- and ours. Benjamin.

 

Very true Benjamin

 

many thanks

 

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What struck me were the line breaks in the first verse. The verse could be read as two statements -- "a child hides," followed by "another pebble beneath our apple tree" -- or as one: "A child hides another pebble beneath our apple tree." It opens up the poem and the mind to possibilities.

 

Tony

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The verse could be read as two statements -- "a child hides," followed by "another pebble beneath our apple tree" -- Tony

 

your notion has more poetry than mine

 

thanks again

 

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