badger11 Posted July 16, 2011 Share Posted July 16, 2011 A child hides another pebble beneath our apple tree. A black pebble, ovular like a smooth seed. In later years it may remind him to skim the sea, skip several waves before finally resting. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted July 16, 2011 Share Posted July 16, 2011 I skipped, like a stone along this magical piece- at once dream like and concrete- Well, well done Badge! DC&J Quote thegateless.org Come on over and check out my poetry substack y'all;-) Or if your bored, head to the Zazzle store: https://www.zazzle.com/store/gateless. If you buy anything I lose a bet, so consider that before you violate the digital rules. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
badger11 Posted July 17, 2011 Author Share Posted July 17, 2011 I can see you skimming those west coast waves now Dr C :0) badge Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted July 17, 2011 Share Posted July 17, 2011 Nicely done Badge.Children offer us many opportunities for philosophical sojourn, pebbles always have a magical significance in their world-- and ours. Benjamin. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
badger11 Posted July 18, 2011 Author Share Posted July 18, 2011 ...pebbles always have a magical significance in their world-- and ours. Benjamin. Very true Benjamin many thanks badge Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted July 18, 2011 Share Posted July 18, 2011 What struck me were the line breaks in the first verse. The verse could be read as two statements -- "a child hides," followed by "another pebble beneath our apple tree" -- or as one: "A child hides another pebble beneath our apple tree." It opens up the poem and the mind to possibilities. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
badger11 Posted July 19, 2011 Author Share Posted July 19, 2011 The verse could be read as two statements -- "a child hides," followed by "another pebble beneath our apple tree" -- Tony your notion has more poetry than mine thanks again badge Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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