David W. Parsley Posted August 7, 2011 Share Posted August 7, 2011 SUMMER PURSUITS Crouched in grass kitten finds swaying caterpillar, bites, springs – his own tail. unpublished © David W. Parsley 2011 Parsley Poetry Collection Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Frank E Gibbard Posted August 8, 2011 Share Posted August 8, 2011 David - a pleasure, hope it does not seem lazy to comment first time on a short one of yours as it is by its nature, form. Suffice to say I have read and appreciated other ones just not got round to commenting. This is a great capture IMO. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted August 8, 2011 Share Posted August 8, 2011 (edited) Nicely done Dave. A pleasure to follow the imagery which has a playful feel-good factor about it. B. Perhaps "eyes swaying caterpillar" Edited August 9, 2011 by Benjamin Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David W. Parsley Posted August 10, 2011 Author Share Posted August 10, 2011 Nicely done Dave. A pleasure to follow the imagery which has a playful feel-good factor about it. B. Perhaps "eyes swaying caterpillar" Thanks for the compliment and the suggestion, Benjamin. Also considering "tracks swaying caterpillar." Sticking with the "find" for the moment, because I like the moment of discovery being here. I hope to see a few more come through the critique pipeline. Please check again and see where the other folks helped me take this, when you bring your own eyes back in a few weeks. Meantime, be carerful what you bite. Best, Dave Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David W. Parsley Posted August 10, 2011 Author Share Posted August 10, 2011 David - a pleasure, hope it does not seem lazy to comment first time on a short one of yours as it is by its nature, form. Suffice to say I have read and appreciated other ones just not got round to commenting. This is a great capture IMO. Hi Frank, I am grateful for the assessment. And glad to hear you like the other works, too. Please feel free to comment as opportunity affords. Like Tinker, I am always open to suggestions to further refine my work. - Dave Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted August 15, 2011 Share Posted August 15, 2011 Very clever, Dave. Induced an unexpected but much needed smile. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted August 20, 2011 Share Posted August 20, 2011 Yes indeed light and brings a much needed smile;-) DC&J Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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