JoelJosol Posted May 12, 2009 Share Posted May 12, 2009 Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fader Posted May 13, 2009 Share Posted May 13, 2009 Excellent shape poem joel! Shaped like a hurricane or tornado. Your poem starts off swirling and chaotic. Broken just like the subject of your poem. But as you read down the poem it becomes more concentrated and falls to silence. Well done! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted May 13, 2009 Share Posted May 13, 2009 Wonderful done Joel. I loved this. Your sense of exercising with the words and visual effects works so well. The expressions are so lovely and strong and the end hits. Very good write my friend Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 13, 2009 Share Posted May 13, 2009 Very clever, Joel. As Fader pointed out, it looks like a tornado. The layout is avant-garde but not overwhelming; the way you type out fall at the end of the poem is quite effective. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted May 13, 2009 Author Share Posted May 13, 2009 Thank you, guys - fader, aleksandra, and tony. It just happened that the theme of the poem allows it to be fashioned this way. So, I thought, why not :-) Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted May 13, 2009 Share Posted May 13, 2009 Hi JoelJosol, As your other readers have observed, the shape is eye-catching and enhances the motif of the poem. I saw a large question mark, underlining the pervading sense of helplessness when love and life take their toll on an individual. Very impressed with your experimenting! goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted May 13, 2009 Author Share Posted May 13, 2009 Thank you, GL. I'm glad that readers see different "things" in the poem's shape. Others told me it's a tear drop in reverse :-) Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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