eclipse Posted August 22, 2011 Share Posted August 22, 2011 My heart is a desert and the desert is a heart we will cross both and the real journey will start. I can see dried up streams and dead men's dreams reflected in a camels eyes as clear as these desert skies. A shaman with a wand with incantations from desert sands I have become your ship escorting you on this strange trip. My tongue is in a trance as the desert winds advance I can hear vultures laughter as the sun begins it's slaughter. Apparitions reveal me as the sun and you as the moon our journey across ice deserts has just begun. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted August 23, 2011 Share Posted August 23, 2011 I like this a lot Eclipse. Title, metaphor, rhythm, rhyme, stanza length, poem length -- all of it's a winning combination. The last stanza really takes me there. After all, Antarctica is a desert. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
abstrect-christ Posted September 4, 2011 Share Posted September 4, 2011 ^I'm with that gentleman^ nicely done. Quote Pinhead "Unbearable, isn't it? The suffering of strangers, the agony of friends. There is a secret song at the center of the world, Joey, and its sound is like razors through flesh." Joey "I don't believe you." Pinhead "Oh come, you can hear its faint echo right now. I'm here to turn up the volume. To press the stinking face of humanity into the dark blood of its own secret heart." "There's a starving beast inside my chestplaying with me until he's boredThen, slowly burying his tusks in my fleshcrawling his way out he rips open old woundsWhen I reach for the knife placed on the bedside tableits blade reflects my determined faceto plant it in my chestand carve a hole so deep it snaps my veinsHollow me out, I want to feel empty"-- "Being Able To Feel Nothing" by Oathbreakerhttps://www.youtube.com/watch?v=aBPy3xNwwL8 "Sky turns to a deeper grey the sun fades by the moon hell's come from the distant hills tortures dreams of the doomed and they pray, yet they prey and they pray, still they prey"-- "Still They Prey" by Coughhttps://soundcloud.com/relapserecords/sets/cough-still-they-pray Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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