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This young girl couldn't

read but she would write

with an inkless pen, her

parents would fight locking

her away for days in a

concealed den with a thin

window, she write about the

fading light of dying stars

and how the darkness hid

her scars. Between her parents

wars the girl watered plants

and flowers with an empty

watering can on rare days

out in this little garden

with the endless drought.

Once again back in her hidden

den she observed a comet and

prayed for it's fire to fill

her inkless pen and on the

wall she wrote in flames about

her parents awful games, this

fiery writing could not be

blown out.

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Larsen M. Callirhoe

this is so sad. made me welt up. very well placed metaphor at the end. wasn' sure about the title of the poem till i read the end. excellent poem.



i do wonder who was the subject of the poem if you don't mind revealing?



Larsen M. Callirhoe

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David W. Parsley

Eclipse, this piece would be unbearably tragic if not for the child's resourcefulness in a punishing environment. This resource speaks to the hope in all of us, the treasure of our own ability to commune through our own narrow windows to reach for things that transcend present circumstance. She is a survivor and the poem's language realizes well, not just the desperation, but a deep-seated nobibility twisted by circumstance. But one senses a preserved path to triumph, however tangled ahead. Bravo.


(I stepped back from this one, afraid tha tI could not be objective. Packs a wallop.)


- Dave

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