eclipse Posted September 5, 2011 Share Posted September 5, 2011 The trajectory of Apollo's fiery arrow lasted almost as long as eternity's. Follow an arrow on its course, trace Apollo’s historical echo to its source- was your music melodious enough to pierce and force its way through history's fog. A songbird’s heart- an intricately strung bow releases a shimmer of notes, an archer’s rhythm is deceptively slow as he unleashes a quiver of arrows. If I could send an arrow back to you in time containing Yeats's rhyme the blues, Beethoven's musical paradigm, would the arrow be returned as the seas return the moons reflection? The moon is medicine for some who sleep, starting with a quarter of a spoon the full measure with the incarnation of a full moon. Apollo piloted his chariot and the singer carries a melody bringing him closer to the source of music or his soul. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
abstrect-christ Posted September 5, 2011 Share Posted September 5, 2011 does this need some editing done to it eclipse? Is the midway prose line meant to be there? And in the 2nd case atleast the interuptive dash is better as a emdash as oppose to en, or did you mean both en's as emdashes so as to call atttention to the line after it; if so then I would review how you manage that kind of dash and how it should look if you're using dashes. aside from that, nice poem. Quote Pinhead "Unbearable, isn't it? The suffering of strangers, the agony of friends. There is a secret song at the center of the world, Joey, and its sound is like razors through flesh." Joey "I don't believe you." Pinhead "Oh come, you can hear its faint echo right now. I'm here to turn up the volume. To press the stinking face of humanity into the dark blood of its own secret heart." "There's a starving beast inside my chestplaying with me until he's boredThen, slowly burying his tusks in my fleshcrawling his way out he rips open old woundsWhen I reach for the knife placed on the bedside tableits blade reflects my determined faceto plant it in my chestand carve a hole so deep it snaps my veinsHollow me out, I want to feel empty"-- "Being Able To Feel Nothing" by Oathbreakerhttps://www.youtube.com/watch?v=aBPy3xNwwL8 "Sky turns to a deeper grey the sun fades by the moon hell's come from the distant hills tortures dreams of the doomed and they pray, yet they prey and they pray, still they prey"-- "Still They Prey" by Coughhttps://soundcloud.com/relapserecords/sets/cough-still-they-pray Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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