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Thirteen Ways of Looking at 50+ Years of Poetry, 9


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David W. Parsley

THIRTEEN WAYS OF LOOKING AT 50+ YEARS OF POETRY

 

Re-revised:

 

IX

 

So little depends

upon

 

a pitch and copper

doghouse

 

grazed by pot

holes

 

pursuant the pack

barking

 

the last blackbird

from view.

 

 

unpublished

© David W. Parsley 2011

 

Re: poems of William Carlos Williams

"The Red Wheelbarrow" http://writing.upenn.edu/~afilreis/88/wcw-red-wheel.html/

"Paterson: Preface" http://arch.ttu.edu/wiki/William_Carlos_Williams_-_Paterson/

"Fine Work with Pitch and Copper" http://andrewlansdown.com/favourite-poems/william-carlos-williams/

Revised:

 

IX

 

So much depends

upon a red doghouse

glazed with rooftiles

jouncing behind the pack

that barked the last

blackbirds out of sight.

 

 

Previous:

IX

 

So much depends

on a red doghouse

jouncing behind the pack

that barked the last

blackbirds out of sight

glazed by rainwater

at the edge of rooftiles

nailed in many circles

beside the white chickens.

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David W. Parsley

Revised to be more minimalist, more Williams-esque.

 

- Dave

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THIRTEEN WAYS OF LOOKING AT 50+ YEARS OF POETRY

 

Revised:

 

IX

So much depends

upon a red doghouse

glazed with rooftiles

jouncing behind the pack

that barked the last

blackbirds out of sight.

 

 

unpublished

© David W. Parsley 2011

 

Re: poems of William Carlos Williams

"The Red Wheelbarrow" http://writing.upenn.edu/~afilreis/88/wcw-red-wheel.html/

"Paterson: Preface" http://arch.ttu.edu/wiki/William_Carlos_Williams_-_Paterson/

"Fine Work with Pitch and Copper" http://andrewlansdown.com/favourite-poems/william-carlos-williams/

Previous:

IX

 

So much depends

on a red doghouse

jouncing behind the pack

that barked the last

blackbirds out of sight

glazed by rainwater

at the edge of rooftiles

nailed in many circles

beside the white chickens.

 

hi DP

 

Some discussion of WCW by members:

 

http://www.poetrymagnumopus.com/index.php?showtopic=2039

 

Perhaps you would consider some white space in shaping your poem:

 

Again so much

depends

 

upon the red

doghouse

 

etc

 

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David W. Parsley

Excellent feedback, badge! I have decided to model the structure completely after "The Red Wheelbarrow," while still nodding to the Stevens orginal and the other WCW sources. That had the benefit of freeing me to address the poetic sound elements so deftly employed by Williams in the original. Perhaps this is now becoming a "worthy parody" at last! Thanks for the suggestion and the pointer.

By the way, that was a very stimulating discussion at the link site. While I find this and other miniatures pleasing, I do not always find such rewards in WCW. I just wanted to pick on one that a lot of people would recognize.

Still, I shouldn't complain: apparently Donald Hall's discussion of the piece motivated Tinker to go on her quest for poetic form. And that benefits all of us here, no?

- Dave

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