David W. Parsley Posted September 9, 2011 Share Posted September 9, 2011 THIRTEEN WAYS OF LOOKING AT 50+ YEARS OF POETRY Re-revised: IX So little depends upon a pitch and copper doghouse grazed by pot holes pursuant the pack barking the last blackbird from view. unpublished © David W. Parsley 2011 Re: poems of William Carlos Williams "The Red Wheelbarrow" http://writing.upenn.edu/~afilreis/88/wcw-red-wheel.html/ "Paterson: Preface" http://arch.ttu.edu/wiki/William_Carlos_Williams_-_Paterson/ "Fine Work with Pitch and Copper" http://andrewlansdown.com/favourite-poems/william-carlos-williams/ Revised: IX So much depends upon a red doghouse glazed with rooftiles jouncing behind the pack that barked the last blackbirds out of sight. Previous: IX So much depends on a red doghouse jouncing behind the pack that barked the last blackbirds out of sight glazed by rainwater at the edge of rooftiles nailed in many circles beside the white chickens. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David W. Parsley Posted September 13, 2011 Author Share Posted September 13, 2011 Revised to be more minimalist, more Williams-esque. - Dave Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
badger11 Posted September 19, 2011 Share Posted September 19, 2011 THIRTEEN WAYS OF LOOKING AT 50+ YEARS OF POETRY Revised: IX So much depends upon a red doghouse glazed with rooftiles jouncing behind the pack that barked the last blackbirds out of sight. unpublished © David W. Parsley 2011 Re: poems of William Carlos Williams "The Red Wheelbarrow" http://writing.upenn.edu/~afilreis/88/wcw-red-wheel.html/ "Paterson: Preface" http://arch.ttu.edu/wiki/William_Carlos_Williams_-_Paterson/ "Fine Work with Pitch and Copper" http://andrewlansdown.com/favourite-poems/william-carlos-williams/ Previous: IX So much depends on a red doghouse jouncing behind the pack that barked the last blackbirds out of sight glazed by rainwater at the edge of rooftiles nailed in many circles beside the white chickens. hi DP Some discussion of WCW by members: http://www.poetrymagnumopus.com/index.php?showtopic=2039 Perhaps you would consider some white space in shaping your poem: Again so much depends upon the red doghouse etc badge Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David W. Parsley Posted September 20, 2011 Author Share Posted September 20, 2011 Excellent feedback, badge! I have decided to model the structure completely after "The Red Wheelbarrow," while still nodding to the Stevens orginal and the other WCW sources. That had the benefit of freeing me to address the poetic sound elements so deftly employed by Williams in the original. Perhaps this is now becoming a "worthy parody" at last! Thanks for the suggestion and the pointer.By the way, that was a very stimulating discussion at the link site. While I find this and other miniatures pleasing, I do not always find such rewards in WCW. I just wanted to pick on one that a lot of people would recognize.Still, I shouldn't complain: apparently Donald Hall's discussion of the piece motivated Tinker to go on her quest for poetic form. And that benefits all of us here, no?- Dave Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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