JoelJosol Posted May 13, 2009 Share Posted May 13, 2009 She will let him go like a book, whose cover once attracted her, its pages once held down her gaze. She had moved on past his breadth, their time together flipping over like scanned pages towards the end. With her reading done and his laughters consumed, she will miss nights when he lay on her breasts, exhausted of each other, under a lamp's glow, she, always taking note of what's left of his borrowed time. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 13, 2009 Share Posted May 13, 2009 I enjoyed the book metaphor, and I found this part to be exceptionally sad: JoelJosol wrote: She had moved on past his breadth, their time together flipping over like scanned pages towards the end. It doesn't have to be this way, Joel. The epilogue can be for the first book ... to be followed by a sequel! Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted May 13, 2009 Share Posted May 13, 2009 Wonderful expressed my friend Joel. Sounds so lovely and emotional. I love how you are ending the poems. And yes, the book metaphor is perfect. The end gives sadness and makes the poem more effective. Thank you for sharing Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted May 13, 2009 Author Share Posted May 13, 2009 Thanks, Tony and Aleksandra. I am glad you felt the color of this poem. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted May 13, 2009 Author Share Posted May 13, 2009 I felt that triplet form is the best form for this poem. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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