Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted May 13, 2009 Share Posted May 13, 2009 new poem softly you whisper to me here in the dark saying i love but the words don't hold true i wish there was more to this relationship as you head out the door. silently you say good bye closing the door behind you will i ever see you again. in my wildest dreams i pray for you to come back through the door you so quietly closed many years ago. casually you come back after all those years. i am but an old man now but can't you see the bloodstains from my heart. you left me with a goodbye letter. how i covered it with my many tears. i do not believe your apology is good enough. so here we are back together again. how this once empty bed still fills so cold. we fall asleep in one anothers arms, i guess that is the best we can hope for. Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted May 13, 2009 Share Posted May 13, 2009 Wonderful written my dear Victor. Again emotional and sensitive poem by you. I loved. You expressed your feelings and your hope so well , on one so touching way. Sadness in this peace hits and provokes longing, and melancholy. Thank you so much for sharing this poem Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted May 13, 2009 Author Share Posted May 13, 2009 yeah aleksandra i wrote this as if i would ever get back with my ex lol. vic Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted May 13, 2009 Share Posted May 13, 2009 yeah aleksandra i wrote this as if i would ever get back with my ex lol. vic Ah Victor my dear friend. I know, I recognized. To hope is good, but sometimes we are hurting us. Just stay fine. And keep your writing. I love to read your poetry. Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 13, 2009 Share Posted May 13, 2009 Victor, I like how this poem seems to toggle back and forth between past and present. The result of the technique is that the yearning becomes amplified as it is contrasted with reality. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted May 13, 2009 Share Posted May 13, 2009 The angst is there, Victor. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted May 13, 2009 Share Posted May 13, 2009 Hi Victor, I think this is one of your best poems. It flows easily and carries a hauntingly poignant tone. Nice writing. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted May 13, 2009 Share Posted May 13, 2009 Hi Victor, Its' wonderful to see you writing again. In the sadness and poignancy you evoke in this poem, one is reminded of Shelley's words: "Our sweetest songs are those that tell of saddest thoughts" This encapsulates the pain, sadness, hopes of reconciliation and a deep longing, all of which combine into a potent mix: Larsen M. Callirhoe wrote: so here we are back together again. how this once empty bed still fills so cold. we fall asleep in one anothers arms, i guess that is the best we can hope for. goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted May 13, 2009 Author Share Posted May 13, 2009 gl i have heard of that quote before but did not know who wrote it. my 12 grade english teacher used it on me when i wrote about my great grandmother dying and i was at her death bed. thanks for the memory. victor Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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