Benjamin Posted October 17, 2011 Posted October 17, 2011 Just be mindful where you are Keep thoughts inside your head. For witch’s cat ‘familiars’ Hear everything that’s said Then take it back to ‘mistress’ Stirring cauldron with her spoon, And shaping rings a-widdershin About the harvest moon. When brewing up a midnight spell If your name is in her head, From this night forth then you will dwell ‘Twixt the living and the dead. Rats and bats fall in her pot Along with girls and boys, Squealing swirling bubbling hot, No one to heed the noise. Some witches do not fly on brooms, Preferring a solid floor. They wait in dingy fire-lit rooms For a knock upon the door. “Trick or treat, a trick or treat?” And she’ll smile from ear to ear, Soon have something fresh to eat “Please come in my dear!” a-widdershin the wrong way of the sun, (or east to west through north.) Quote
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted October 19, 2011 Posted October 19, 2011 loved the brew you weaved. made me smirk and put a large grin on my face from "ear to ear" as you put it. hehe. victor Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe
tonyv Posted October 24, 2011 Posted October 24, 2011 I'm not so sure this one's for the children, Benjamin. It gave me chills and put me in a Halloween mood. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic
Benjamin Posted October 29, 2011 Author Posted October 29, 2011 Thanks Victor and Tony. Well...it might make the little blighters think twice about knocking on strange doors :-) Quote
dedalus Posted November 4, 2011 Posted November 4, 2011 Gheerie ... ghostly and eerie! Marvellous balance in the rhyming scheme: it looks effortless but I know it wasn't!! Quote Drown your sorrows in drink, by all means, but the real sorrows can swim
David W. Parsley Posted November 5, 2011 Posted November 5, 2011 Excellent use of rhythm and rhyme for a true Halloween treat. Perhaps treads a little far down the Elm Street nightmare avenue for young children, but today's 10 to 12 year olds could be fair game... - Dave Quote
goldenlangur Posted November 7, 2011 Posted November 7, 2011 Hi Benjamin, Your create a palpable atmosphere of shadows, the shifting of borders between the worlds, the way nature takes on a powerful magical significancet. I particularly love how you evoke the cat's mistress: ...Stirring cauldron with her spoon, And shaping rings a-widdershin About the harvest moon. Thank you. Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.
Benjamin Posted November 8, 2011 Author Posted November 8, 2011 Bren. Some things flow like diarrhea out of paranoia when you have a wife whose black cat follows her everywhere and spits at all who come too close. Dave. You are dead right. Listening to the language of 10 and 12 year old kids in the play-park near my home, some of them could well do with a good fright. goldenlangur. I wrote this in what I thought was a light-hearted tongue-in-cheek vein , although I confess to stealing "a-widdershin" from William Bell Scott's “The Witches Ballad” which is rather more traditional-- lengthy, but still well worth a read. My thanks to you all for the responses. Benjamin Quote
dr_con Posted November 12, 2011 Posted November 12, 2011 Benjamin- Loved it and, of course its good for children- A little terror always helps the season along;-) DC&J Quote thegateless.org
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