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Who Is The Lamb of God (Revised.. I hope It is Stronger Now


Larsen M. Callirhoe
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Larsen M. Callirhoe

2:38 pm 11/07 2011

 

Who Is The Lamb of God

 

Here my blizzard winter begins

and my blossoming spring ends.

Where life is lonely I only see

an empty shell devoured by serpents

after the rodents have feasted.

 

In a reflection once serenity was held.

Now there is only me sitting all alone.

 

The time ticks away into infinity.

When will this clock ever end?

 

My body temperature is on fire

and I can't even hold my head up.

 

The sun burns my eyes

where I want to end it all.

 

To look in the sky where angels dance

and birds chirp away. Still no justice to end

all the heat that has burned and blackened me.

 

All God has done is let them slaughter me

like a lamb at the harvest where no one feeds.

All they do is drink my blood like it is

an ecstacy of bread and wine.

 

The words flow out of me like a sweet melody.

I am an endless river of lost spriraling thoughts.

I am in a field of dreams and I beg for mercy.

 

Am I that divine? I'm descended from powers

no one has an inkling of understanding to.

To reach out my hand and be a dark Lord

or be a friend to the truth and stand alone.

 

There is another way. It is where ego’s clash

as passions burn and souls are lost to lust.

Fire burns along my entire aching body.

Eventually everything all comes from

the thundering of God's eyes that melts the ice.

 

My hand reaches out but only a voice or two listens.

Where the wind blows; softly, yet ever and gently so.

Softly the wind blows and stills me in the damp night.

 

Yet this body decays and still I am going blind.

How I desire the frost more than the blazing heat

of the Sun that scorches the day time sky.

 

The horizon has seen her personality change to pink

tears. What unjustice have they done unto my eyes?

I have beheld the tears of my blood that flows and

floods the world and seven years time has past.

 

Several graves of loneliness caress my heart in a sea

of ecstasy. Or will they leave my side when dawn rises

and tomorrow comes thy way..

Larsen M. Callirhoe

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David W. Parsley

Victor. Victor. Wow. I want to get out now, no let me stay and be ravaged here with you. Powerfully imparted.

 

- Dave

 

(one complaint: "nightmare ever end" is too mundane for this highly original, impassioned poem)

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Larsen M. Callirhoe

Hi Dave I am getting interesting comments on this one and thank you too for reading and commenting.,. I was mediating and in a trance when I wrote this. My upstairs thoughts told me what to title tis one at. there is three choppy spots. maybe i could say.

Several graves of loneliness

caress my heart in a sea

of ecstasy. Or will they leave

my side when dawn rises

and tomorrow comes thy way..

Larsen M. Callirhoe

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Hi Victor,

 

A fabulous opening stanza:

 

 

 

Here my blizzard winter

begins and my blossoming

spring ends. Where life

is Ionely I only see

a empty shell

devoured by serpents

after the rodents feasted

 

 

The poem is trance-like and enchanting.

 

 

Thank you.

goldenlangur

 

 

Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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Hello Victor. I don't normally enthuse about themes of personal angst, but this poem has some really good lines. I liked the impressive opening stanza, although you need to amend that typo on L5 “an empty shell”. I particularly liked “My hand reaches out but/ only a voice or two listens/ where the wind blows softly,” :-8) Benjamin.

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abstrect-christ

so here I am just cruising through in the background reading some of the latest poems and then this excellent poem comes along --

 

great job larsen, much appreciative of the care you took in presenting this, there is however one little typo, S11 L2, it should be 'gently' -- aside from that, I only have to echo the previous accolades.

 

-- That abstrect ninja :ph34r:

Pinhead

"Unbearable, isn't it? The suffering of strangers, the agony of friends.

There is a secret song at the center of the world, Joey, and its sound is like razors through flesh."

Joey

"I don't believe you."

Pinhead

"Oh come, you can hear its faint echo right now. I'm here to turn up the volume.

To press the stinking face of humanity into the dark blood of its own secret heart."

"There's a starving beast inside my chest
playing with me until he's bored
Then, slowly burying his tusks in my flesh
crawling his way out he rips open old wounds

When I reach for the knife placed on the bedside table
its blade reflects my determined face
to plant it in my chest
and carve a hole so deep it snaps my veins

Hollow me out, I want to feel empty"
-- "Being Able To Feel Nothing" by Oathbreaker

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=aBPy3xNwwL8

"Sky turns to a deeper grey

the sun fades by the moon

hell's come from the distant hills

tortures dreams of the doomed

and they pray, yet they prey

and they pray, still they prey"
-- "Still They Prey" by Cough

https://soundcloud.com/relapserecords/sets/cough-still-they-pray

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Larsen M. Callirhoe

thank-you everyone for the amazing comments and feedback on this one. i made a few adjustments from that made this good poem a great one. so thank you all for the insight to knudge me along the way.

 

victor aka larsen

Larsen M. Callirhoe

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Hi victor,

 

This version does read smoother.

 

One of your best to date. :smile:

goldenlangur

 

 

Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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