fdelano Posted November 22, 2011 Posted November 22, 2011 In the half-night I sit by black windows, seeing only tigers’ eyes of dim street lamps. Safe and warm in my swivel chair, I wait for pills to carry my too-active brain and weary body back to a soft bed filled with nothing but thoughtless time. My fingers push keys to form words that cannot re-create the fear of unknown realities that overcome me when they will, strangely, my brain not letting my brain know what it will soon discover hidden in aged crevices and cracks in its former smooth walls of carefree youth. I sip the sour wine of hope and listen to the rumble of a train, the engineer shattering the solid quiet with long bursts of his air horn, as required, but no doubt enjoying the rage of those he wakes to join him as he flees past the other limits of this small town. All day the sky has been heavy with cold gray, hiding now all stars and planets, only faith keeping them in their westerly swim unseen. Surely they are there, Cassiopeia up forty-five degrees to the north, Polaris unmoving. My nightly Earth turns and wobbles; the stars move in the opposite direction, firmly on course. Quite often, one tires and flares as it gives up its orbital effort to streak gloriously for a moment. Quote
David W. Parsley Posted November 26, 2011 Posted November 26, 2011 Carries a hint of the mystery that carries Keats' "Bright Star". I like this meditative piece very much, the way it touches profundities in the glancing way characteristic of insomnia. Sometimes it is here that we most certainly know of these wobbling, shrouded ineffables and the effect that persists long after, voice like the train wanderer vanishing quickly down its other set of rails. Nice. - Dave Quote
fdelano Posted November 27, 2011 Author Posted November 27, 2011 Please accept my thanks and apologies for being remiss in responding to others. I will try to do better. Dave, your critique seems better than the poem itself. Thank you for "seeing" the meanings and not just the words. fdh Quote
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