dr_con Posted December 21, 2011 Share Posted December 21, 2011 ______ ______ ______ ______ ______ Force/Dragon Yang crawls across my skin The Dragon The Ox By now you should have some control she says But all men are junkies Different adaptive tools Geek or nerd shakes Have replaced Fear and trembling Kierkegaard now less Reduced to photo epilepsy Accidental neural hacks Digital shock replaces authentic Thunder as our key strokes slow Barely a whisper Hardly a glance She won’t complain Once the stream Has ended In this quiet mossy pool Obstacles overcome Satisfaction sterile And approved The bull bellows flame The women run This incarnation Barely moves But Universe Manifests Just The Sa Me Kundalini rises mountains crumble Shiva sits on his throne and you inherit it all I watch I wait I am And together We make it all Unless you forget Or forgo What we promised. Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted December 21, 2011 Share Posted December 21, 2011 A simple human act can be elevated by a gathering of unusual ( yet interesting) metaphors. They prompted me to Google. The Dragon i.e: in Eastern philosophy, is said to be a deliverer of good fortune and a master of authority. Contrasting with the Ox's steady and serious approach to life. I liked the lines, “Kiergaard now less/ Reduced to photo epilepsy”. (Danish Soren Kiergaard : “Science and scholarship want to teach that becoming objective is the way. Christianity teaches that the way is to become subjective,to become a subject.”) Through to Kundalini “serpent power, or a residual power of of pure desire.” Your poems always seem to observe the fact that “good poetry should make you think”. Benjamin Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David W. Parsley Posted December 24, 2011 Share Posted December 24, 2011 Okay, Doc, I really enjoy this kind of writing, but that doesn't mean I get it. Thanks to Benjamin for saving me a few steps down Google Lane. Interesting decision to not capitalize "inherit" - all other lines begin with a cap, even the break in "same." Attention is drawn to the word. At the same time the sense of the sentence is helped and this reader is grateful. Jehovian intrusion and preeminence seems to be announced in this line, but I am unsure of the You being addressed: the reader; the bull (Gilgamesh's Bull of Heaven perhaps, or sticking with Hindu traditions, sending us back to google some more?); one of the Hindu deities previously mentioned; the She from earlier in the poem? Perplexing. The first stanza seems to set up a showdown between the Emperor of Ice Cream and the litany of deities to follow. Again, I sheepishly confess to losing the thread. You okay with this? Enjoyed. Happy Holidays, - Dave Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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