goldenlangur Posted January 11, 2012 Posted January 11, 2012 As a child he knew the dark drop of disused wells. The smells of lichen and rotted animals. A piece of sky caught overhead, the sharpened light of stars. Rodents nosed around him for stray walnuts tossed by the wind. He knew if he sat still in this black shaft no one would come looking for him. Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.
dr_con Posted January 12, 2012 Posted January 12, 2012 Dark, Deep and fun- A well crafted mood piece- Really raised a few hairs... Liked its melancholy darkness- Many Thanks Golden! DC&J Quote thegateless.org
badger11 Posted January 14, 2012 Posted January 14, 2012 The retreat into a dark place to escape the darkness. A glimpse of sky, the company of vermin, the stench of rotting things - the way the world shrinks inwards. I also felt this could be an adult retreating to a 'childhood' place, which made me wonder if the evil had been perpetuated (the cycle of abuse). Either way, outside the narrative speculation, I felt the darkness. badge Quote
Benjamin Posted January 15, 2012 Posted January 15, 2012 Concise and well thought out. It works on more than one level and your last two lines round it off nicely. Benjamin Quote
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