goldenlangur Posted May 13, 2009 Share Posted May 13, 2009 waiting - I rehearse what to say imagine you smile but the phone never rings neither yours nor mine 23.4.8 goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted May 13, 2009 Share Posted May 13, 2009 hello gl/ u manage to put the outside world in a crystal ball waiting alone i believe for a miracle perhaps. i love the opptamism in the poem. victor Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted May 13, 2009 Author Share Posted May 13, 2009 Hi victor, I like your image and idea here very much: Larsen M. Callirhoe wrote: ... the outside world in a crystal ball waiting alone i believe for a miracle perhaps. victor Hope springs eternal and yet... You read well, my friend. Thank you very much goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 13, 2009 Share Posted May 13, 2009 This one's close to home for me, Golden. Always I try to impress upon people that life's too short to not communicate with one another. I like how you show that the falling short is on both parties' ends. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted May 13, 2009 Share Posted May 13, 2009 Wonderful tanka as always goldenlangur This mix of feelings makes some paradox. Because you are waiting and on the end you tell that not any phone rings on both sides. So you are just waiting and not plan to you to ring the phone . So that shows the hurtful pride is present, and the longing and expectation for the other to do that what you want and need. Interesting, and ok I agree with Tony the life is too short so one of actors in this poem must be more clever and to DO . Short poem, tanka but always deep and long. Thank you for this poem what provokes thinking... Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fader Posted May 13, 2009 Share Posted May 13, 2009 A well written tanka! So much is said in so few words! This is so forlorn and sad! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
summayya Posted May 13, 2009 Share Posted May 13, 2009 You won't step ahead and call the other and he/she won't reach out to the phone and call either and so you both wait and you both hope and you both wait.... Sad and neatly written! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted May 13, 2009 Author Share Posted May 13, 2009 Thank you Tony, Aleksandra, fader and summayya for your thoughtful and considered reading of this tanka. My apologies for this late acknowledgment of your reviews as I've been away for the annual family rituals. But your kindness and encouragement are indeed appreciated. goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted May 13, 2009 Share Posted May 13, 2009 Hi gl, I love it! This tanka captures and communicates so much. At first the anticipation, the excitement that comes with preparing for a moment, but the moment doesn't come and finally the insight, wisdom born of the experience. Anyone who reads this will feel this inside their chest and at the end the light will click on. A real gem. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted May 13, 2009 Author Share Posted May 13, 2009 Many thanks Tink for taking some trouble to mull over the allusions in this tanka. Your response is most encouraging and I cannot express how much I appreciate your continued support of my writing support, With grateful thanks, goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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