jainrohit Posted March 5, 2012 Share Posted March 5, 2012 they are raising their voice again boys are becoming boys again in this age of technology kids wont get back their toys again their past resonates with gun--sound but they don't want that noice again far from its Hellenic past europe's turning deutsch * again "rohit " as this life is so short why not be mad ? rejoice again -- rohit jain . ( * ) based on accent deutsch can be pronounced as daw-ich or daw-ish...... here its in close proximity to boys ..... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted March 5, 2012 Share Posted March 5, 2012 Welcome, Rohit Jain. Terrific submission. I always liked the ghazal but havent given it a try yet myself. There is that American expression that the only difference between men and boys is the cost of their toys, but this poem leads in a different direction: men becoming boys again ... and not good ones. Especially ominous is L8: europe's turning deutsch * again. I enjoyed it a lot. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted March 6, 2012 Share Posted March 6, 2012 Interesting poem, and it's good to read something different, Rohit Jain. Welcome to the board. Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jainrohit Posted March 6, 2012 Author Share Posted March 6, 2012 Welcome, Rohit Jain. Terrific submission. I always liked the ghazal but havent given it a try yet myself. There is that American expression that the only difference between men and boys is the cost of their toys, but this poem leads in a different direction: men becoming boys again ... and not good ones. Especially ominous is L8: europe's turning deutsch * again. I enjoyed it a lot. Tony thanks tony ..... i have been posting on one other poetry forum (poetsanctuary ) and was not able to find out any other site .... but after i got to know about poetry magnum opus , my view changed . thanks for including me in this group and reading this gazal Interesting poem, and it's good to read something different, Rohit Jain. Welcome to the board. Aleksandra thanks Aleksandra Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted March 22, 2012 Share Posted March 22, 2012 Hi rohit, I love the ghazal but have had very little luck in writing in the form. It is a lot harder than it looks and you seem to have mastered the form. Nice contribution, I like the concept behind the content and it fit the form perfectly. I would love to use your poem as an example in the reference section, may I have permission to do so? Also can I ask, does rohit mean "rejoice"? Note: For those unfamiliar with the form, simplified: independant complete couplets are strung together connected by a refrain (The last word of each couplet is a repetition of the last word of the two lines of the 1st couplet "again"} and a linking rhyme which precedes the refrain of the 2nd line {"boys", "toys", "noise", "deutsch", "rejoice"} . The last couplet usually includes the writer's name "rohit" which often has a double meaning. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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