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Fixing the Omens

 

Lived on sugar and coffee today

Don’t want to admit

how little money I have

set aside

 

You know how it is

All the women I attract

were suicidal

 

So you follow your heart and the omens

someplace strange and different

a land of big dreams and little dogs

and until the feral bright green parrot

 

cawed in the tree

I didn’t know what I was doing here

That’s how it is

this life

 

Of awkward moments

long pauses sudden glances

I worry about the collapse

 

feeling fine

My housemate gave me a ride back

from that cheap food place

in the possessed car

 

It purred when I got in

a far cry from the demonic roar

it let out when I was not dreaming

 

You understand of course

why I no longer drink

but spent my last

few dollars

 

On fine sake and beer.

thegateless.org Come on over and check out my poetry substack y'all;-) Or if your bored, head to the Zazzle store: https://www.zazzle.com/store/gateless. If you buy anything I lose a bet, so consider that before you violate the digital rules.

 

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Hi DC, This is really good! I am with you all of the way through. The poem flows with logic through surprising images.. And I get it... The feral parrot is genius... How So California that is...So you left SF for LA, hmmm.

 

~~Tink

~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~

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David W. Parsley

Sigh. That isn't fair, Tink. I don't "get" the poem at all, even less after reading your exposition! I just kind of like the leaping cadence of image shift, the sense of change that sets upon us or we set upon the flow of life. Other than that, I confess to being lost. (In LA!) An enjoyable tour, Doc.

 

- David

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Thanks Tinker & David- This in a bizarre way is what I call a 'shopping list' poem- If you've never had that particular list it can (and does) become confusing;-) I appreciate both your experiences with this and thank you for taking the time to read;-)

 

J&DC- lost in LA due to trying to 'Fix the Omens' Which I'm pretty sure is the name of my next collection;-)

thegateless.org Come on over and check out my poetry substack y'all;-) Or if your bored, head to the Zazzle store: https://www.zazzle.com/store/gateless. If you buy anything I lose a bet, so consider that before you violate the digital rules.

 

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  • 2 weeks later...

I think it's remarkably fluid, Juris. A typical day? I find that the same things are on my mind every day, like every day I'm on the same journey in a slightly different dream.

 

Tony

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Hey Tony- Thanks for the feedback and I'm glad you 'got it' exactly! ;-)

 

Juris

thegateless.org Come on over and check out my poetry substack y'all;-) Or if your bored, head to the Zazzle store: https://www.zazzle.com/store/gateless. If you buy anything I lose a bet, so consider that before you violate the digital rules.

 

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