Like a dog

[JoelJosol]

The poem hangs like a dog,

its entire length suspends from the edge,

held by a lanyard on its neck.

 

The readers are like passers-by,

watching the immobile body hang quietly,

until the dog wags itself and wails.

 

But, the owner is not around,

and the house is sealed; the entry

is only by climbing to the front porch.

 

No one feels it right to make the climb,

and so they wait until its neck

gets broken and leave.

 

But, as fortune would have it,

the writer pulls back the poem

out of view of everyone else.

[Larsen M. Callirhoe]

unsual way of stating an entrance to the poem. nevertheless it has oel's unique style to it which the flavor i truly appreciate. exalt for a different take on this type poem. a definite winner in my book. and good to ee ya around.

 

victor

[tonyv]

Loved the dog for poem metaphor, Joel. Interesting ending. Writers can be overprotective with their work.

 

Tony

[JoelJosol]

Thanks guys :-)

[dr_con]

A cruel and unusual treatment of poetry- I like it! Dr. Con

[Benjamin]

Nicely done. Tantalizing metaphors that had me chasing my own tail. Benjamin.

[JoelJosol]

Benjamin,

[Tinker]

Hi Joel, Your opening line certainly got my attention... I felt horrified, helpless and disbelieving. I think I couldn't get over the image reading on. (I kept seeing the scene from the movie

, when the boy hangs his pitbull in the alley. It is so tragically sad.) You certainly know how to create an impression...

 

Can't say this is one of my favorites.. but certainly powerfully written.

 

~~Tink