dr_con Posted April 24, 2012 Share Posted April 24, 2012 The Storms Between Not being able to quiet the water is part of our problem in this storm I have become accustomed to skirting edges standing in doorways as the rain falls thoughts rise up anxiety pools across streets we strolled reconfiguring safe passes into dark roads that barely seem familiar although our circumstances remain when it stops and the sun washes new the unknowable indefinable place we will re-name home. Quote thegateless.org Come on over and check out my poetry substack y'all;-) Or if your bored, head to the Zazzle store: https://www.zazzle.com/store/gateless. If you buy anything I lose a bet, so consider that before you violate the digital rules. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted April 24, 2012 Share Posted April 24, 2012 if only we could find solace and truth comfort sheltering us or weathering us from all the storms thrown at us in life. hey an easier metaphor for me to chew at on this one or i am becoming more aware in my vocabulary or is it richer that yo'll have made me in thoughts. well inked penned poem my poet friend. well done! much enjoyed wadding through this also. victor Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted April 24, 2012 Author Share Posted April 24, 2012 Thanks Victor!! As always appreciate your appreciation;-) Quote thegateless.org Come on over and check out my poetry substack y'all;-) Or if your bored, head to the Zazzle store: https://www.zazzle.com/store/gateless. If you buy anything I lose a bet, so consider that before you violate the digital rules. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted April 25, 2012 Share Posted April 25, 2012 A cleverly worded piece which offers a lesson in metaphor well worth noting. I particularly liked, "I have become accustomed to skirting edges standing in doorways as the rain falls" Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted April 25, 2012 Author Share Posted April 25, 2012 Thank You Benjamin- Yes that line was the inspiration that created the rest of the piece;-) Quote thegateless.org Come on over and check out my poetry substack y'all;-) Or if your bored, head to the Zazzle store: https://www.zazzle.com/store/gateless. If you buy anything I lose a bet, so consider that before you violate the digital rules. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted April 25, 2012 Share Posted April 25, 2012 I, too, very much like the part that Benjamin points out. The speaker is probably not a homeless person, but in some way he is like one. He stands in doorways as the rain/falls. He does it often. He is somehow beholden to others if only for the temporary shelter he obtains from their doorways, unbeknownst to them. Reads like the story of my life. Rain or shine, the "circumstances" "remain." I love it. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted April 26, 2012 Share Posted April 26, 2012 Thanks for this. As someone accustomed to flash floods during our rainy season and had waded on them trying to recall the configuration of the street, the sidewalks, the manholes, I can relate both at the physical and metaphorical. Although "not being able to quiet the water", the human spirit pushes through with whatever is left of what the speaker of the poem will "re-name home". Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fdelano Posted April 26, 2012 Share Posted April 26, 2012 The tragedy that puts them in the doorway for shelter does not have to be rain and floods, although the causes may be the same. Seeking shelter in a doorway is near the end of helplessness. Been there. Survival comes first. Thank you, Doc. A metaphor of the mind could also be appropriate. Makes me think of an alcove in the middle of the night. fdh Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted April 26, 2012 Author Share Posted April 26, 2012 JJ, Tony, fdh- Thank you for your kind comments... I appreciate the feedback and am thrilled by you getting it;-) really it was a personal poem- @ the moment I'm into torturing metaphors;-) And you all got it;-) Thanks for taking the time! Juris & Dr. Con Quote thegateless.org Come on over and check out my poetry substack y'all;-) Or if your bored, head to the Zazzle store: https://www.zazzle.com/store/gateless. If you buy anything I lose a bet, so consider that before you violate the digital rules. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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