Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted May 14, 2009 Share Posted May 14, 2009 Tonight's the night it feels like the first time that i have looked deeply into your eyes i now have seen your soul gazing ever deeper into your thoughts i wish we could make love under the night stars of the sky but somethings holdin me back i wanna know do you really love me this has been in my mind since the day i met you you see i really love you and i really want to be with you the rest of my life do you agree and say i do because i surely feel like i am on top of the world i want to live wih you the rest of my life and make love all night until the sun comes up. for tonights the night we let all ambitions go let our wings make us soar through the blue sky because tonight is the night we make love Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted May 14, 2009 Share Posted May 14, 2009 Hello Victor, A totally different theme in this poem and no less moving. Whereas your other poem had a sense of longing beyond the physical, this verse is laden with an ache for intimacy and love. Underlying this longing is a deep sense of commitment and tenderness and this gives your poem its power: Larsen M. Callirhoe wrote: Tonight's the night ... do you really love me this has been in my mind since the day i met you you see i really love you and i really want to be with you the rest of my life do you agree and say i do because i surely feel like i am on top of the world .... for tonights the night we let all ambitions go let our wings make us soar through the blue sky because tonight is the night we make love A sense that this intimacy and sensual pleasure symbolize a link, precious and lasting beyond the ecstasy of the moment. It's so good to see you in such good poetic form goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted May 15, 2009 Author Share Posted May 15, 2009 goldenlangur wrote: Hello Victor, A totally different theme in this poem and no less moving. Whereas your other poem had a sense of longing beyond the physical, this verse is laden with an ache for intimacy and love. Underlying this longing is a deep sense of commitment and tenderness and this gives your poem its power: A sense that this intimacy and sensual pleasure symbolize a link, precious and lasting beyond the ecstasy of the moment. It's so good to see you in such good poetic form goldenlangur thank you so much for that comment gl. Goldenlangur wrote: - "it's good to see you in such good poetic form" - this remark made my day. it took me less then fives minutes to write this. it was so natural and it flowed out of me like an out pouring of hard fast rain storm. vic Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Frank E Gibbard Posted May 15, 2009 Share Posted May 15, 2009 Larse - I don't know why your tonight's the night reminded me or at least it popped into my head "because the night belongs to lovers" you know the song, it chimed with me anyway, just those lines and I don't imply they are the same, but your own I know as poured out. In fact this looks and has a sound of a song and might make one and a good one at that. All the best - Frank Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted May 15, 2009 Author Share Posted May 15, 2009 Larse - I don't know why your tonight's the night reminded me or at least it popped into my head "because the night belongs to lovers" you know the song, it chimed with me anyway, just those lines and I don't imply they are the same, but your own I know as poured out. In fact this looks and has a sound of a song and might make one and a good one at that. All the best - Frank i know two songs that are called tonight's the th night one by rod steward which i love and one by the rock group daughtry (bs) i like this song and both those songs inspired me to write this poem. i know the words are different but if i published this one as a song with a few touch ups i think i would owe roality fees to both groups i hink. thanks for reading frank. all the best to you to larse ps being borderline diabettic sucks. instead of eatting a few chocholate chip cookies it was popcorn instead this weekend. i love popcorn but i adore chochalate chip cookies lol Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted May 15, 2009 Share Posted May 15, 2009 Victor i agree with GL. I'm glad to see you with your poetical and romantic voice my friend. I know this kind of writing by you I loved this one. Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
summayya Posted May 15, 2009 Share Posted May 15, 2009 I agree with Frank this came out like a song Vic. Glad to see you in such a wonderful poetic flow. I wish I could write some poetry too Keep writing and sharing my friend. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Frank E Gibbard Posted May 15, 2009 Share Posted May 15, 2009 Larse - I don't know why your tonight's the night reminded me or at least it popped into my head "because the night belongs to lovers" you know the song, it chimed with me anyway, just those lines and I don't imply they are the same, but your own I know as poured out. In fact this looks and has a sound of a song and might make one and a good one at that. All the best - Frank i know two songs that are called tonight's the th night one by rod steward which i love and one by the rock group daughtry (bs) i like this song and both those songs inspired me to write this poem. i know the words are different but if i published this one as a song with a few touch ups i think i would owe roality fees to both groups i hink. thanks for reading frank. all the best to you to larse ps being borderline diabettic sucks. instead of eatting a few chocholate chip cookies it was popcorn instead this weekend. i love popcorn but i adore chochalate chip cookies lol Hello again Larse,- the song I was thinking of this by Patti Smith "Because the Night" http://uk.youtube.com/watch?v=uoGdx3I3dPE Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted May 15, 2009 Author Share Posted May 15, 2009 hi frank i love that song. i haven't heard it in ages lol. thanks for the you tube. i will be listening to it. thanks again amegio.\\ \\ larse aka vic Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 15, 2009 Share Posted May 15, 2009 Lyrical verse is my favorite, Victor, and this is very lyrical. i wanna know do you really love me this has been in my mind since the day i met you The poem is honest and straightforward. It takes courage to reveal one's innermost feelings, and verse is the appropriate vehicle to do just that. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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