eclipse Posted May 14, 2012 Share Posted May 14, 2012 Could diamond with sixty faces, sought, Secure a place on the historic throne? A nation's royal elegy is caught In open hand of history and shown To all- remote, indifferent audience While to recumbent Queen sleep offers dreams. A postman gathers mail- faces commence Into a royal dream connecting seams Of royal narrative, letters arrive On doormats, bearing stamps with Queenly head. She wakes to diamond gala, to revive A sovereign synergy and she will read Her own reflected face, the mirrored guise Apparent in her subjects' gilded eyes. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted May 14, 2012 Share Posted May 14, 2012 you write the most uniue poetry my poet friend,. you leave much food on the table to ponder over. this is a excellently woven poem. i enjoyed your take on this thronely family concerming the queen. victor Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted May 18, 2012 Share Posted May 18, 2012 I enjoyed this topical sonnet. A celebration of privilege that links us to a bygone age, contrasts with the “all-remote, indifferent audience” Your Royal Mail theme works well and the end couplet rounds it off nicely for me. Just hope you weren't chasing a knight-hood. B. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted May 19, 2012 Share Posted May 19, 2012 i didn't even think about it the way you put it benjamin. i thought it migh be a letter of alpreciation. but thinking about your comments i think it could be plausible. well eclipse was that your true intention tobe recognozied by the monarch? i was thinking it wa just appreciation or is it even deeper. O i do aopplaud you anyway. i like your writings allot anyway to begin with... victor Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
eclipse Posted May 21, 2012 Author Share Posted May 21, 2012 this poem is so very deep deep... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted May 22, 2012 Share Posted May 22, 2012 You have obviously given this a great deal of thought with subtle words that unlock a propensity to raise various moot if not political points. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 28, 2012 Share Posted May 28, 2012 I'll leave the content of this provocative, metrical sonnet to those who are more in-the-know. But I will add, nice work on the form, Eclipse. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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