dr_con Posted May 15, 2012 Share Posted May 15, 2012 Caught in Transition Canine funeral mourners bark Gone gone gone beyond as the sojourner passes comfortable family homes their strange warnings beautifying this journey from shore to shore The temporary landlord asks if anything can be done about clothes well traveled and road stained knowing the beyond beyond but we are caught in transition A friend says You are impatient gone but not waiting to see the new life growing welcoming this traveler to put down seasonal roots to re-forget how precious how delicate illusions of permanence or memories of the future really are At the peak of summer these hued flowers these long suspended days stand defiant and innocent of already becoming gone. Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 28, 2012 Share Posted May 28, 2012 Not a word out of place or too much. The "sojourner" is no stranger to temperance, impermanence. He is a passerby, and he knows it, no delusions. Terrific work, Juris! Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted May 29, 2012 Author Share Posted May 29, 2012 Thanks Tony for your kind words. Intelaced with the heart sutra:-) cheating... HA .. Juris Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted May 29, 2012 Share Posted May 29, 2012 just amazing bloddy bllant poetry. everything just right and perfect. i really dig this. victor Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted May 31, 2012 Share Posted May 31, 2012 This is ambiguous and very skilfully done. The more I read it, the less funereal your sojourner seems: more tangible, one who pauses in hotels perhaps, where the mind settles on diversions and conversations of the day--- transposes them into philosophical thoughts. I particularly liked the last two stanzas. Your work is always interesting and a pleasure to read. Benjamin. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted June 1, 2012 Author Share Posted June 1, 2012 Viktor, Benjamin- Thank you both for your kind words! Time to memorize and present;-) DC& J Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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