dr_con Posted June 2, 2012 Share Posted June 2, 2012 No Safe Place Behind the white picket fence on the sunny porch where I fed my morning habits a fatherly voice I grew up on antipsychotics In the local bar comparing the ages of psychedelic acoustics wondering was the Invisible Temple always here and have the routes changed a good-old Freak says goodbye with hand games to me a complete stranger declaring You’re too smart for your own good In the woods surrounded by the hum of vegetable silence dialogue with Others comes in nighttime motions topographies delineated by fireflies and loons mumbled messages from sleeping partners skry There is no safe place for Magicians and Shamans or Poets under any phase of our Moon The only Absolute Change and Return the gate to what you tried valiantly to forget This tree This field The crack of a ball That Chord The moment before you fell from the cliff Not a care in the world a dog biting your heels The Buddha eats strawberries The Christ has a last meal and nowhere and nothing will ever be the same. Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted June 4, 2012 Share Posted June 4, 2012 Captures a moment, Juris. And every moment is like this one: nothing will ever be the same. I loved "Freak says goodby with hand games," "vegetable silence," and "fireflies and loons." Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted June 4, 2012 Share Posted June 4, 2012 This has a temporal dimension about it that reminds me of the biblical quote, “In my father's house there are many mansions---” B. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David W. Parsley Posted June 17, 2012 Share Posted June 17, 2012 Hey, doc, this one really works for me. It has all the intangibles in the way it moves, has that best of all qualities in a poem of this type (i.e. a "leaper"): the sense that the poet is speaking truth; his own Truth, but also the outlines of your own. And in so doing, a shared experience. Nice! - Dave Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted June 17, 2012 Author Share Posted June 17, 2012 Thanks everyone- Greatly appreciate the time you put in to read my mad rambles and that you all got something from it;-) Much Grace! Juris Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted July 6, 2012 Share Posted July 6, 2012 Hey D_C, I was with you all of the way on this one. It flowed so easily yet unexpectantly with surprises yet familiar images. I really liked it, especially how it winds down at the end to the logical conclusion. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted July 7, 2012 Share Posted July 7, 2012 i don't know how i missed this one. this was a great journey to an awesome read. one of your best. i loved its ending the best. as tinkersaid it is logical though it might not have been the exact comments you were looking for with this poem. just awesome stuff. i will definitely come back to this one for fture reads and different takes. thank you for sharing. victor Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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