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Glass baby


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The tattooed clock on my back is ticking,

the glass baby inside me is kicking,

the wind helps me give birth

to this exotic child of a different earth.

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Hi eclipse, This short piece has some very interesting images, ticking tattooed clock / kicking glass baby.... The tattooed clock was easy to conjure in my mind with so many meanings. The kicking glass baby a little more difficult, the action clear but the apparition and meaning more obscure.

 

I liked the frame pairing a feminine rhymed decasyllabic couplet with an rhymed uneven couplet which gave irregular order to the piece very appropriate for the theme. The familiar observed with a different perspective.

 

~~Tink

~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~

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Larsen M. Callirhoe

so many wonderfl images in my mine are conjured up from your array of wwords that are well written here. i am inpressed you make it so crasp and sonding flawless. exalt ace word my poet friend.

 

victor

Larsen M. Callirhoe

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Could this be a metaphor for a poem, Eclipse? The poet is reminded to write by the ticking clock, and he's compelled to do so by the exotic child that inevitably must emerge ...

 

Tony

Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

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