Jump to content
Poetry Magnum Opus

apple tree


eclipse
 Share

Recommended Posts

I seek the fruit trees intimacy

he doesn't seek mine, he needs water

my soul needs the wine made from

the treasures he flaunts on his vine.

The fruit tree his dreams are too deep

with an unclosed eye he watches me and

his treasures as he sleeps. About me he

dreams watching time steal my history as

I become an echo in its slipstream and I

will not steal his fruit as time steals

from me, I will wait for the wind to shake the

tree as the winds of time strip me.

Link to comment
Share on other sites

Larsen M. Callirhoe

the metaphors work well throughout the poem. the ending is perfect. very crisp and flowed with a beautiful sweat cadance. thank you.

 

victor

Larsen M. Callirhoe

Link to comment
Share on other sites

  • 2 weeks later...

The speaker is aware of his needs, and he is also aware of the tree's needs. Even so, there is a charming naivety on his part; he will wait for the fruit to fall due to natural causes, not pick it off the tree. It's almost like when a child believes that we wait for an animal to die of old age before we eat it.

 

Tony

Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

Link to comment
Share on other sites

Join the conversation

You can post now and register later. If you have an account, sign in now to post with your account.
Note: Your post will require moderator approval before it will be visible.

Guest
Reply to this topic...

×   Pasted as rich text.   Paste as plain text instead

  Only 75 emoji are allowed.

×   Your link has been automatically embedded.   Display as a link instead

×   Your previous content has been restored.   Clear editor

×   You cannot paste images directly. Upload or insert images from URL.

 Share

×
×
  • Create New...

Important Information

By using this site, you agree to our Guidelines.