apple tree

[eclipse]

I seek the fruit trees intimacy

he doesn't seek mine, he needs water

my soul needs the wine made from

the treasures he flaunts on his vine.

The fruit tree his dreams are too deep

with an unclosed eye he watches me and

his treasures as he sleeps. About me he

dreams watching time steal my history as

I become an echo in its slipstream and I

will not steal his fruit as time steals

from me, I will wait for the wind to shake the

tree as the winds of time strip me.

[Larsen M. Callirhoe]

the metaphors work well throughout the poem. the ending is perfect. very crisp and flowed with a beautiful sweat cadance. thank you.

 

victor

[tonyv]

The speaker is aware of his needs, and he is also aware of the tree's needs. Even so, there is a charming naivety on his part; he will wait for the fruit to fall due to natural causes, not pick it off the tree. It's almost like when a child believes that we wait for an animal to die of old age before we eat it.

 

Tony