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Out on a limb (Revised version)


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Do not touch me

Do not stand too close

And please no questions boys

 

Let me make my entrance

With serene self-acceptance

For this is my true choice

 

And do not wink at me

Or pinch my ass

Or offer me drinks in that cocktail glass

 

I am here for amusement

I am here for a dance

I am not here for lusty hands trying to take a chance

 

You see virtue and discretion have become my new best friends

Because lust and revelry drove me around the bend

 

Enough of the lies and repetitive trials

The betrayals and the games and the furtive denials

 

I pledge allegiance to myself

Represent only me

Place my faith in the ‘I’ and wish to remain free

 

And yet the moment that I see him

Or am drawn to his voice

I shall reach for love again

For I shall have no other choice

To receive love, you have to give it...

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Ah! The complexities and equations involved with finding love. And how wrong are they who describe such an important facet of human nature as a game. I particularly liked “I pledge allegiance to myself/ represent only me” After reading the poem a couple of times I felt that you should consider switching St 5 to St 6.The chronological fluidity and emphatic nature of the statement would then be strengthened, but that's just me thinking out loud. :smile:

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Clean, passionate and very real. Enjoyed immensely Douglas! Juris

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  • 2 weeks later...

Douglas, that was an anti-climatic ending after passing through the turn, you took the reader into another one.

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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