Tinker Posted October 21, 2012 Share Posted October 21, 2012 Third Dimension (a Quaterion) Forgotten in a tight airless attic, a thing that was to prove problematic, a Halloween reflective diorama in reenactment of a psychodrama. The shoebox, webbed and painted black, a tiny coffin's cedar lid drawn back, inside a body stiff in death, an axe imbedded in the head, a final tax. A challenge to create this poematic with ghoulish display in frightful panorama. The sounds with screeching tone, elegiac and words don't always tell the lonely facts. ~~ Judi Van Gorder Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
abstrect-christ Posted October 25, 2012 Share Posted October 25, 2012 i liked it... Quote Pinhead "Unbearable, isn't it? The suffering of strangers, the agony of friends. There is a secret song at the center of the world, Joey, and its sound is like razors through flesh." Joey "I don't believe you." Pinhead "Oh come, you can hear its faint echo right now. I'm here to turn up the volume. To press the stinking face of humanity into the dark blood of its own secret heart." "There's a starving beast inside my chestplaying with me until he's boredThen, slowly burying his tusks in my fleshcrawling his way out he rips open old woundsWhen I reach for the knife placed on the bedside tableits blade reflects my determined faceto plant it in my chestand carve a hole so deep it snaps my veinsHollow me out, I want to feel empty"-- "Being Able To Feel Nothing" by Oathbreakerhttps://www.youtube.com/watch?v=aBPy3xNwwL8 "Sky turns to a deeper grey the sun fades by the moon hell's come from the distant hills tortures dreams of the doomed and they pray, yet they prey and they pray, still they prey"-- "Still They Prey" by Coughhttps://soundcloud.com/relapserecords/sets/cough-still-they-pray Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
eclipse Posted October 25, 2012 Share Posted October 25, 2012 this is very good Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Frank E Gibbard Posted October 25, 2012 Share Posted October 25, 2012 Needing a bit of clarification of this an intriguing one for me Tink. I'll reserve comment. Did spot a wee typo embedded not impedded I think. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted October 26, 2012 Share Posted October 26, 2012 Tinker, I get the picture of no one using this item anymore. Forgotten and lonely gave them away for me. But you did not offer us insight why it was problematic :-) Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David W. Parsley Posted October 28, 2012 Share Posted October 28, 2012 Hi Tink, enjoyed the form and mood, the aura of language. If you decide to revise, another stanza to shed some oblique light on some of the questions above, would retain the mystery and tie it down just a bit. P.S. Is the form quaterion, or quaternion (a mathematical form for describing moving bodies with six degrees of freedom)? Enjoyed! - Dave Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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