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Betrayal


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Betrayal

Ripped by yellowed calcified nails,
my breast is shredded, split open,
leaving a pulsing heart naked,
vulnerable to the bony
gnarled fingers that slide in
and grasp to twist and snatch
without conscience the slick
surface oozing crimson.
How do I heal without a heart?
-------------------- --- Judi Van Gorder

~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~

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Surreal, Tinks.

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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goldenlangur

Hi Tink,

 

You use such visceral images with great effect. Some brilliant details:

 

"calcified nails, slick surface oozing crimson"

 

Although the images are physical, one imagines the wounding to be of the spirit.

 

goldenlangur

goldenlangur

 

 

Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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Aleksandra

Tink very original expressions you use in this poem. I like it.

 

the ending line I love the most

How do I heal without a heart?

Much enjoyed

 

Aleksandra

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

History of Macedonia

 

 

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Betrayal from the victim's point of view ... with a gothic twist!

 

You have given me an idea for an exercise: write a poem which presents the viewpoint of another. I guess the way to start would be to ask oneself how one would feel if the shoe was on the other foot in any given situation.

 

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