eclipse Posted November 17, 2012 Share Posted November 17, 2012 An Oxfam shop assistant spills his expensive bottled water as he texts. A Mother, vegan, pagan goes through the pockets of a coat that originated from Next- her daughter shakes a snow globe and the square outside is adorned with a white robe. A traffic warden is| indecisive about the purchase of a book on existentialism. The mother buys an electric moon clock and the snow globe. In the square a salvation army band plays and the daughter demands a hot dog-as snow flakes collide with musical notes-she gives her hot dog to the tramp whose beard sways in the wind- is it the music or a small gesture that makes a hobo cry. A clock glows in a child's bedroom- sleeping beneath the moon a tramps hums a melody because he knows he isn't alone. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David W. Parsley Posted November 17, 2012 Share Posted November 17, 2012 Nice theme and touching symbol, Barry. Appropriate to the season. - Dave Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dcmarti1 Posted November 20, 2012 Share Posted November 20, 2012 Great enjambment - I envy. Also, VERY clear images. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
eclipse Posted November 20, 2012 Author Share Posted November 20, 2012 thank you both Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
badger11 Posted December 17, 2012 Share Posted December 17, 2012 The images and narrative are warm, insightful, amusing, poignant. badge Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted December 17, 2012 Share Posted December 17, 2012 The snakes and ladders of fortune are all too apparent these days when 'snakes' seem to be multiplying faster than traffic cones. The 'traffic warden' and 'indecisive' in the same sentence as 'a book on existentialism' was a wry touch. Your overall imagery is meaningful and not just related to the season. B. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dedalus Posted December 30, 2012 Share Posted December 30, 2012 Typical day in provincial shopping England: as such, marvellously accurate! Quote Drown your sorrows in drink, by all means, but the real sorrows can swim Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted January 13, 2013 Share Posted January 13, 2013 I loved the surprising shift from apparent consumerism to unexpected charity. The child, mother, and street person connected and are now bonded on a universal level. Nice work, Barry. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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