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A swallows moonlit flight thrills

a lake unveils the moons echoed lamp

giving me sight of visions rapture distills.

 

A dream lit canvas empties and fills

with visions of a swallow obscured by fog and damp

a swallows moonlit flight thrills.

 

I see a bat silhouetted against moon rills

and I am sealed with twilight stamp

giving me sight of visions rapture distills.

 

And into the day night trills

as the twilight sounds it's vamp

a swallows moonlit flight thrills.

 

On the second night a clouded sky kills

moonlight as the lake relights its lamp

giving me sight of visions rapture distills.

 

 

And as the night time sky refills

A solitary drifter leaves camp

A swallows moonlit flight thrills

giving me sight of visions rapture distills.

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David W. Parsley

Wonderful mood and image. I could ask for a tweaking of the diction (a bit stilted), especially in the repeating lines of this villanelle. Nice to see your experiments in form continuing, Barry.

 

- Dave

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Larsen M. Callirhoe

this is amazing write Barry. i enjoyed reading this. i am fascinated with swallows to begin with and, this poem really captures this beautiful creature's essence.

 

Victor

Larsen M. Callirhoe

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