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What is the colour of fear;

Crimson eviction from the womb

or the shadow-less grey of oblivion?

 

 

 

goldenlangur

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Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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Hi gl, I just posted a poem at the Connection Freedom that almost seems my answer to the question posed by your poem.

 

"crimson eviction" almost blotched my screen with red when I read it. That is powerful stuff.

 

~~Tink

~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~

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Larsen M. Callirhoe

hi gl,

 

very effective short poem. i love the whole poem. very stimuliting. whats good about this poem is its metered perfectly. every line flowed so beautiful. i love the imagery int his line. wow very tasteful.

 

Crimson eviction from the womb

 

and the last line is the truth about child being birthed into this world. just a perspective since you mentioned the womb in the second line is all.

 

victor

Larsen M. Callirhoe

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Aleksandra

Goldenlangur, this is good lapidary way of writing.

 

very powerful and moving. I think the both solutions makes sense of the colour of fear. And the last line, the third one is simply perfect. It is very touching.

 

Thank you for sharing my friend

 

Aleksandra

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

History of Macedonia

 

 

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goldenlangur

Hi Tink,

 

It's amazing how you poem answers this one perfectly! From birth to the wilderness of losing one's way in life, fear dogs. I'm grateful that you found the image of birth here, startlingly appropriate.

 

Thank you very much for your perceptive read and also the link to your poem, which I do remember reading in th e old forum. It is a privilege to be linked to your work.

 

goldenlangur

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Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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goldenlangur

Hi Victor,

 

You've made my week with this remark!:

 

Larsen M. Callirhoe wrote:

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...this poem is its metered perfectly.

victor

 

For someone like myself who knows nought about poetry techniques, I'm very pleased that you found the poem worked.

 

 

A big thank you icon_smile.gif

 

 

 

goldenlangur

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Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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goldenlangur

Hi Aleksandra,

 

What an original and indeed elegant word to use - "lapidary"! I went googling to see how this might refer to my piece and I'm truly grateful for your fulsome praise of my writing effort.

 

It's gratifying that this shorter style, I'm experimenting with, seems to work.

 

Thank you very much.

 

goldenlangur

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Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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What is the colour of fear;

Crimson eviction from the womb

or the shadow-less grey of oblivion?

 

It's a good question, Golden. You chose two effective metaphors for fear. I think that these days I fear the crimson eviction from the womb (into the world) more.

 

I do sometimes long for the blackness of sleep, but the color gray does not make death so appealing; it somehow imparts a sense of isolation and unrest. Now that's something to fear!

 

Tony

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goldenlangur

Hi Tony,

 

You've put your finger on it:

 

"isolation"

 

 

Thank you for your perceptive read.

 

 

goldenlangur

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Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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