gaagii Posted December 2, 2012 Share Posted December 2, 2012 Hi Tinker, I remember this one and as David so aptly puts it above it conveys "the enduring ache of senselessness, of loss" that will always stay with us. (I asked Tony if it was okay to post something here on the same subject that was previously posted on PP and he said it was okay if you had no objection.) Aftermath September's shattered leaves lie buried deep beneath soft shrouds of new November snow. They fell, still green, before their time to sleep - lost hopes and dreams that we will never know , the many trysts that now they cannot keep - all ruptured then, by one infernal blow. I wept for all those severed from the tree, but now I grasp each day that's left to me. Barbara Hartman, June 1, 2002 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted December 5, 2012 Share Posted December 5, 2012 Hi gaagii, Welcome to PMO. I was afraid no one would spot your post lost in a reply to one of my old poems so I moved it here. I am excited you have joined us here and can't wait to read more of your work. This piece reflecting on 9-11 is lyrical and touching. I have always admired the beauty in your poems especially your Navajo poems which I hope you share here. So glad you joined us my friend. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
gaagii Posted December 7, 2012 Author Share Posted December 7, 2012 Hi Tinker, thanks for your kind words and warm welcome. I think it is an Ottava Rima, at least that is the way I had it filed on the other site. I have another Stave. Where should I post it here? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted December 7, 2012 Share Posted December 7, 2012 I didn't even pay attention to the form when seeing your post. I was just happy you were here. I have linked the poem to my Ottava Rima article in the reference section. Just post your Stave in the Member Poetry section as a new post and I will link it to the form description. Thanks. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
badger11 Posted December 8, 2012 Share Posted December 8, 2012 I like that green/sleep sound combo cheers badge Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David W. Parsley Posted December 9, 2012 Share Posted December 9, 2012 Hi gaagii (how pronounced?), an intriguig debut on the site. September's shattered leaves lie buried deep beneath soft shrouds of new November snow. They fell, Barbara Hartman, June 1, 2002 I found these lines especially poignant and symbolic. - Dave Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted January 13, 2013 Share Posted January 13, 2013 Nice work, Gaagi, from form to content, all summed up succinctly in the epiphanous couplet. I hope you'll share more of your work soon. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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