[R - Situation, Suggestiveness] Green Lantern DC - Tyranny

[dcmarti1]

(Green Lantern is a bar in DC. Or, it used to be.)

 

He astonished me

with his willingness:

filling my mouth with himself.

 

He delighted me

with his repetition:

filling my hands with his face.

 

He answered me

with his refusal:

emptying my heart with his silence.

[Benjamin]

I like the irony of the word "Tyranny" used in this social context. The poem over all reminded of the lyrics to Eurythmics' "Sweet Dreams Are Made Of This" and in particular that line "Everybody's looking for something." B.

[Larsen M. Callirhoe]

hi Marti. Interesting, i would not have thought this to be an R rated poem. i have written lines many a times with suggestive emotives like yours written here. now you got me thinking. raw fueled emotions showed here in a lovely poetic style.

 

victor

[dcmarti1]

Annie Lennox comparison? I'll take it, B. :)

 

Vic, I tried to make the style consistent: the first line always has he and me, the second line is always about his "something", and the last is always mine & his. It is NEAR syllabic, but not really. Raw? Yes, that was a disappointing night of 2 ships passing.

 

Thanks, guys.

[tonyv]

So much going on in this one. An intriguing setting established by the title and its corresponding note, nostalgia, regret -- this short, appealing piece imparts a familiar sense of "linger" to which I can definitely relate. Thank you for this.

 

Tony