fdelano Posted January 20, 2013 Share Posted January 20, 2013 Last of the Good Wine At first, it was sweet with upfront flavors still filled with sugar. We soon found different tastes of different grapes, later, even the qualities of those grown on hillsides or valleys, some tailored for sales of volume. We learned to match wine and food, usually taking in too much of both. Those with years of partaking told us secrets about aromas that lingered on the back of the tongue, embuing a satisfaction of getting our money's worth and bragging rights. We found those special bottles and shared with imbibing friends. Soon, we would not consider a good meal without a good wine. There was pride in the rituals of opening, decanting and serving. Later, the less expensive bottles caught our attention, giving as much pleasure for half the price, adding to our egos for astuteness in knowing how to find such bargains. We began to stock our cellars. Eventually, the opinions of others mattered not, and we drank according to personal wants and needs, always admiring the years and talents that created lifelong arts as we smugly sipped their masterpieces. Tinker, tailor, soldier, thinker. (With consideration to John LeCarre.) Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dcmarti1 Posted January 20, 2013 Share Posted January 20, 2013 I am amazed at the range of imagination and themes with poems posted here. This one included. Crafted and concise. I really enjoyed these two: aromas that lingered on the back of the tongue we smugly sipped their masterpieces. And I do not even like wine. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dedalus Posted January 20, 2013 Share Posted January 20, 2013 Not a great poem, pal, but it made me thirsty for wine. Not just any wine, either ... Cut your adjectives. Americans (you, for example) are totally in love, bedazzled by adjectives. Cut them out entirely and see what's left. No, it's true. A good poem has 3-4 adjectives per stanza, no more than that: the action moves on nouns and slithery verbs. Sometimes I tell you things you don't want to hear ... and you get pissed off, and I don't blame you. If you did it to me, though, chances are I'd listen a little. Well, probably not. Definitely not, come to think of it. Take care, compadre Bren Quote Drown your sorrows in drink, by all means, but the real sorrows can swim Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
eclipse Posted January 20, 2013 Share Posted January 20, 2013 strong work this Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted January 20, 2013 Share Posted January 20, 2013 well Franklin i, too, think about wine and its aromas the same way. excellent poem in my opinion. victor mike lash Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fdelano Posted January 21, 2013 Author Share Posted January 21, 2013 Not a great poem, pal, but it made me thirsty for wine. Not just any wine, either ... Cut your adjectives. Americans (you, for example) are totally in love, bedazzled by adjectives. Cut them out entirely and see what's left. No, it's true. A good poem has 3-4 adjectives per stanza, no more than that: the action moves on nouns and slithery verbs. Sometimes I tell you things you don't want to hear ... and you get pissed off, and I don't blame you. If you did it to me, though, chances are I'd listen a little. Well, probably not. Definitely not, come to think of it. Take care, compadre Bren Count your adverbs, Tater. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fdelano Posted January 22, 2013 Author Share Posted January 22, 2013 Thanks to all who still find something, good or bad, in the ravings or maudlin thoughts of this simple brain. Paco Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dansalinger Posted January 25, 2013 Share Posted January 25, 2013 it took me a few years to figure out that some of the cheaper wines tasted better than their more expensive cousins. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dedalus Posted January 26, 2013 Share Posted January 26, 2013 Sorry if I pissed you off. Tend to enjoy pissing you off, pal, sort of giggling in my cheap fuckin awful Spanish wine at ¥398 a bottle, about $4.29. Holy Christ, diarhoea! (I challenge you to spell that fuckin word). I am definitely coming to America next year. Don't know if they'll let me in, of course, but hey, ho, the barley O! Quote Drown your sorrows in drink, by all means, but the real sorrows can swim Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fdelano Posted January 26, 2013 Author Share Posted January 26, 2013 I'll alert INS. Diarrhea? I haven't been really pissed off since I departed the USAF. They are accepting women now; perhaps there's a job for you. Still working on my study of the History of Ireland. Like most histories, I suspect much of it is lies or exaggerations. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted January 26, 2013 Share Posted January 26, 2013 I liked your poem which is unpretentious, and like the wine... not all poetry needs to appeal only to a conoisseur to be enjoyed. You must make allowances for the Irish though... but also give credit where due... they do generally know a lot about booze,horses, leprechauns, poteen and good company. Re: history, I reckon truth known, Joseph Goebbels stole from them that line... " The bigger the lie, the more it will be believed." But then... they'd probably say " nah! the Brits started it." Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted February 24, 2013 Share Posted February 24, 2013 This is well written. The lyrical poem is only one variety of "poetic." I enjoyed the clarity, the no-nonsense application of language in this narrative. The last two verses, followed by the last line, are my favorites. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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