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Death is rowing, roving, ready with an open

bottle to claim this ship as it slouches into

port avoiding his grip. Inside a tavern

sewing with eyes closed her singing echoes through

thin windows, death bottles a deaf child's song,

her mariner Father arrives with gifts, rings

of silver she accepts, refusing gold. Amongst

offerings are ear rings of the moon hung

hastily on the ears of a dear daughter.

The Father is silent unlike the sea,

he returns to the waters, she utters

a melody into a shell and death slyly

waits for a ship he is lured by shanty's

from a shell, her silver tears tumble.

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Sewing with eyes closed ... haunting. I loved the variety of symbolism. There's the ship in the bottle, the acceptance of silver and refusal of gold, moon earrings, father/daughter and the more abstract "death." All of it's a curious maritime/witchy blend. Loved death/deaf, too.


Nice work, Barry. You regularly put forth fresh stuff. This one's one of your more intriguing poems.



Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

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David W. Parsley

Barry, I second Tony's comments. The activities of Death in the poem provoke a response mixing alarm and fascination. I lose the thread of action in the closing lines but am still drawn back.


- Dave

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