Jump to content
Poetry Magnum Opus

Dance?


dedalus
 Share

Recommended Posts

It is not love but need

that attracts

 

yet facts so cold

can hardly hold

 

a turbulent imagination.

 

There go all your Hollywood movies,

there go all your wartime songs.

 

A man needs a woman.

A woman needs a man

 

from the time that human life began

everything, everything, everything …

 

the troubadours, romantic novels,

even adolescent pop songs

 

mirror this fascination.

Drown your sorrows in drink, by all means, but the real sorrows can swim

Link to comment
Share on other sites

I am learning that some troubadours had some VERY raunchy poems. Who knew? I agree with Benjamin: upbeat.

Link to comment
Share on other sites

Chaste as a unicorn, me. This particular poem at least ...

Drown your sorrows in drink, by all means, but the real sorrows can swim

Link to comment
Share on other sites

  • 4 weeks later...

A lyrical study of the lyrical tradition. I like it a lot, Brendan. I actually have a few suggestions.

 

Drop the last five lines, revise one of the verses, and rip off George Benson for the couplet, so it looks like this:

 

It is not love but need

that attracts

 

yet facts so cold

can hardly hold

 

a turbulent imagination.

 

There go all your Hollywood movies

there go all your clubland songs:

 

And the girl became a woman

Every woman needs a man ...

 

I love the girl, I love the woman ...

 

[last line optional to make it less sexist!!!]

I'd lose the question mark in the title, too. Just call it Dance.

 

I dunno. Might swing the pendulum to lyrical?

 

Tony

 

 

Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

Link to comment
Share on other sites

Join the conversation

You can post now and register later. If you have an account, sign in now to post with your account.
Note: Your post will require moderator approval before it will be visible.

Guest
Reply to this topic...

×   Pasted as rich text.   Paste as plain text instead

  Only 75 emoji are allowed.

×   Your link has been automatically embedded.   Display as a link instead

×   Your previous content has been restored.   Clear editor

×   You cannot paste images directly. Upload or insert images from URL.

 Share

×
×
  • Create New...

Important Information

By using this site, you agree to our Guidelines.