Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted March 14, 2013 Share Posted March 14, 2013 Poem, Songs of Tomorrow There was a reason I loved to hear piano music. Summertime in my youth Oh how I loved to play. Today is a different world. My life has been turned upside down. Still they're children playing in the patio and their laughter is pleasing to the ears. Am I that old man now. Bathing in a lake. I know no other way it appears. I skated down the deserted roads many hours past midnight. I would swim in the ocean at sunrise now I live in a different world. The stars are twinkling and the streetlights are fading in a new dawn. I try to recollect about yesteryear and still I am serenaded by tunes I loved as a child. The wrinkles in my heart show you who I have become. Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fdelano Posted March 15, 2013 Share Posted March 15, 2013 Emotional and sauterne, the memories. I especially like "wrinkles in my heart." We all have unique wrinkles, inside and out. Good work, Lash. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dcmarti1 Posted March 15, 2013 Share Posted March 15, 2013 I agree with fdelano. The "wrinkles in my heart" jumped out at me immediately. Great line and image. Line #2, did you mean "piano" or did you mean "paino"? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted March 15, 2013 Author Share Posted March 15, 2013 i meant "piano" marti thanks for catching, victor Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
badger11 Posted March 16, 2013 Share Posted March 16, 2013 There was a reason I loved to hear piano music. It is the plain opening that I found most effective vic. There is immediacy, but not overstated. I like this restraint in a poem. cheers badge Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted March 17, 2013 Share Posted March 17, 2013 "I try to recollect about yesteryear and still I am serenaded by tunes I loved as a child." You could say our memories make us what we are.. it's rarely easy to reminisce without appearing maudlin though you've managed this very well. There's a warmth here that encourages me to go back and read it over. Enjoyed Ben. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted March 18, 2013 Share Posted March 18, 2013 Victor you surprised me with this poem. I remember your very early work, it tended to ramble a bit but your passion for the art kept you on course. This piece is contained and polished with wonderful imagery and a master's use of poetic devices. I love it, I very am impressed. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted March 19, 2013 Share Posted March 19, 2013 I agree with the others; you've done a nice job with this, Victor. It doesn't give specifics, and therefore more readers might be able to relate. The poem is quite lovely. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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